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In the last century, the first man to walk on the moon said it was ‘a giant leap for mankind’. However, some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the last century, the first man to walk on the moon said it was ‘a giant leap for mankind’. However, some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives. n61Ag
Conquering new horizons beyond the planet earth is a remarkable achievement for the humanity. Nevertheless, some people believe that in the previous century the first astronaut walked on the moon was an awe-inspiring accomplishment, while others are not. This essay will discuss why the first steps on the moon considered to be a great leap for mankind. To embark upon, the first footsteps on the moon accelerates the confidence of scientists to think about the far side of the planet earth. Because, since this was the first successful attempt to descent individuals on other stars, it had become a pivotal step to think about moving to different planet and stars which are millions of light years away. Consequently, a phenomenal revolution had taken place in science and technology. International space station is a great example for advancements, where astronauts live in the space for months to carry out researches. Furthermore, soon after first landing on moon, people had started research about life on other planets where humans can live like on earth. ‘Perseverance’ the latest space vehicle to mars by Nasa is the latest example of such researches in the modern era. Additionally, nowadays space and other planet travel has become commercialized. Space-X by Elon musk is the best example where this company is planning to send tourists to other planets. This all started from the initial steps on the moon in the last century. To conclude, the first walk on the moon by human being was really a great leap for mankind as it helped scientists to think about life on the far side of the planet and ignited a technology revolution.
Conquering new horizons beyond the
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earth is a remarkable achievement for the humanity.
Nevertheless
,
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some
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people
believe that in the previous century the
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first
astronaut walked on the moon was an awe-inspiring accomplishment, while others are not. This essay will discuss why the
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first
steps on the moon considered to be a great leap for mankind.

To embark upon, the
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first
footsteps on the moon accelerates the confidence of scientists to
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think
about the far side of the
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planet
earth.
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, since this was the
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first
successful attempt to descent individuals on
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other
stars, it had become a pivotal step to
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think
about moving to
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different
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planet
and stars which are millions of light years away.
Consequently
, a phenomenal revolution had taken place in science and technology. International
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space
station is a great example for advancements, where astronauts
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live
in the
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space
for months to carry out researches.

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,
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after
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first
landing on moon,
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people
had
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started
research about life on
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other
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planets
where humans can
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live
like on earth. ‘Perseverance’ the latest
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space
vehicle to
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Nasa
is the latest example of such researches in the modern era.
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, nowadays
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space
and
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other
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travel has become commercialized. Space-X by
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Elon musk
is the best example where this
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company
is planning to
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send
tourists to
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planets
. This all
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started
from the initial steps on the moon in the last century.

To conclude
, the
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walk on the moon by human being was
really
a great leap for mankind as it
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helped
scientists to
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think
about life on the far side of the
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planet
and ignited a technology revolution.
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IELTS essay In the last century, the first man to walk on the moon said it was ‘a giant leap for mankind’. However, some people think it has made little difference to our daily lives.

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