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In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel about on holiday.

In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel about on holiday. q7KE
As the expanse of technological innovations is overhauling each sphere of life, travelling has become easier as compared to previous days when there was dearth of transportation modes. Although some people surmise that people are likely to travel in their own nations, nevertheless, I vehemently expouse that various reasons would compel people to travel in other countries. To begin with, let us shed some light on reasons
As the expanse of technological innovations is overhauling each sphere of life, travelling has become easier
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compared to previous days when there was dearth of transportation modes. Although
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some
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surmise that
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are likely to travel in their
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that various reasons would compel
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people
to travel in other countries. To
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reasons

IELTS essay In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel about on holiday.

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66 words
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