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in the companies promotions should gives to employees they are inside the company, not to someone who are new employees or new hiring.

in the companies promotions should gives to employees they are inside the company, not to someone who are new employees or new hiring. XoJ7w
It is difficult to say that you should get the promotion either from an inside company or from the outside company. the company should give priority to their current staff for promotion rather than new ones. it is necessary to discuss the merits and demerits before going to a conclusion. There are many advantages to do hiring within the company. To begin with, The employee is familiar with the company and they do not require special training and experience, because they did already by doing work. Moreover, the employee will be loyal about work into the company, because he knows how to help business growth. Furthermore, they will feel more confident because of promotions and rewards so they will work very hard with an extra effort which is a plus point for the company. On the door side, if the company will hire from outside then-current employees will feel nervous because they worked for many years and did not get promotions. In addition, new employees will require training for work and rules about the company. apart from this, if a new employee will not feel confident about the new task then they could may resign from the work, in that case, it is just of money for the company. whereas, if the company found a good talent and benefits for business then they should hire from anywhere, which will boost their business. however, it mainly depends on business needs and works. to conclude, it totally depends on business news if they found the perfect person for the perfect position then they should I am from inside or outside of the company.
It is difficult to say that you should
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get
the promotion either from an inside
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company
or from the outside
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company
.
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the
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company
should give priority to their
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current
staff for promotion
rather
than
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new
ones.
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it
is necessary to discuss the merits and demerits
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before
going to a conclusion.

There are
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many
advantages to
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do hiring
within the
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company
. To
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begin
with, The
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employee
is familiar with the
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company and
they do not require special training and experience,
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because
they did already by doing
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work
.
Moreover
, the
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employee
will be loyal about
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work
into the
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company
,
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because
he knows how to
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help
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business
growth.
Furthermore
, they will feel more confident
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because
of promotions and rewards
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so
they will
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work
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very
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hard
with an extra effort which is a plus point for the
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company
.

On the door side, if the
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company
will hire from outside then-
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current
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employees
will feel nervous
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because
they worked for
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many
years and did not
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get
promotions.
In addition
,
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new
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employees
will require training for
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work
and
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rules
about the
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company
.
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apart
from this, if a
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new
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employee
will not feel confident about the
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new
task then they
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could may
resign from the
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work
,
in that case
, it is
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just
of money for the
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company
.

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whereas
, if the
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company
found a
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good
talent and benefits for
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business
then they should hire from anywhere, which will boost their
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business
.
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however
, it
mainly
depends on
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business
needs and works.

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to
conclude, it
totally
depends on
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business
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news
if they found the perfect person for the perfect position then they should I am from inside or
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outside of
the
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company
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IELTS essay in the companies promotions should gives to employees they are inside the company, not to someone who are new employees or new hiring.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
271 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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