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in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

nowadays, the world suffers from miserable crises hunger, despite the advanced technology in all agriculture fields, in this essay, I will elaborate what are the essential factors for this issue and suggested solutions for it. Firstly, I will shed light on the hunger issue which affects people badly in terms of health, security, wellness, there are many factors that cause this problem like civil war, as some countries prioritize purchasing weapons in the first place and the other life needs like food have been ignored by them, for example, my grandmother narrated a tragic story to me that one day in the middle of war while her father was struggling to secure food for his family, he has been shooted and died by the army, as a result, the family was starving and suffering the rest of their lives because they couldn't find the primary needs for life on the other hand, there is a numerous responsibility and burden lies on the individual's shoulder and the society as well, the one should reserve and not misused the food even if he has extra or useless food, he can volunteer to the needy people, and the government should apply new rules to protect the sources for food such as forbidden building on farmlands and impose fins against those will violate the rules. in conclusion, if the person and the society co-operate together in ensuring food safety, the world would be a better place and our new generation will have a prosperous life without pain from hunger.
nowadays
, the world suffers from miserable crises hunger, despite the advanced technology in all agriculture fields, in this essay, I will elaborate what are the essential factors for this issue and suggested solutions for it.

Firstly
, I will shed light on the hunger issue which affects
people
badly
in terms of health, security, wellness, there are
many
factors that cause this problem like civil war, as
some
countries prioritize purchasing weapons in the
first
place and the other life needs like
food
have been
ignored
by them,
for example
, my grandmother narrated a tragic story to me that one day in the middle of war while her father was struggling to secure
food
for his family, he has been
shooted
and
died
by the army,
as a result
, the family was starving and suffering the rest of their
lives
because
they couldn't find the primary needs for life

on
the other hand, there is a numerous responsibility and burden lies on the individual's shoulder and the society
as well
, the one should reserve and not misused the
food
even if he has extra or useless
food
, he can volunteer to the needy
people
, and the
government
should apply new
rules
to protect the sources for
food
such as forbidden building on farmlands and impose fins against those will violate the
rules
.

in
conclusion, if the person and the society co-operate together in ensuring
food
safety, the world would be a better place and our new generation will have a prosperous life without pain from hunger.
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IELTS essay in spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
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