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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem.

In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem. Gj9j
In today’s era, people are using the technology ( GIS software and GP agricultural) to get good quality food and improve all features of our life even in the department of agriculture However, there are some people who were finding food, which they can satisfied their hunger. In this essay will discuss the possible reason for this and give some solution to lessen the issue. To begin with, mostly parts resulting in this problem are inflation and ignorance of government. On other word, everything from rice to bread has become to expensive it is not essay for homeless and big family to earn money. Unlike, the government does not care about the people who are hungry. For example, the population of hunger in Pakistan sharply increases, most especially in todays situation at thirty-six and nine tenths percentage of people who sleep with empty stomach and the government shelters do not take action for it. Alternatively, there are possible solution to this problem. Firstly, government should examine on prices on the cousins. Secondly, the head of government’s shield should preparer enough food to everyone. For example, because of this pandemic, the percentage of hunger people in the world dramatically increases. But the government preparer or donate some foods like rice, bread, can goods, instant noodles, and drinks to the homeless people. In this action of government can reduce the proportion of people who are hungry. In conclusion, because of irresponsible of government and escalation of food prices are the one of the reasons why are the people still hungry. At the same time, taking a action by government can significantly can reduce this situation or problem. -280-
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GIS software and GP agricultural) to
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good
quality
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all features of our life even in the department of agriculture
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people
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were finding
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their hunger. In this essay will discuss the possible reason for this and give
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solution to lessen the issue.

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. On other word, everything from rice to bread has become to expensive it is not essay for homeless and
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big
family to earn money. Unlike, the
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government
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people
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are hungry.
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situation at thirty-six and nine tenths percentage of
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sleep with empty stomach and the
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shelters do not take action for it.

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should examine on prices on the cousins.
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shield should preparer
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enough
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food
to everyone.
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in the world
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preparer or donate
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. In this action of
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are hungry.

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,
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of irresponsible of
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and escalation of
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prices are the one of the reasons why are the
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still
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action by
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can
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this situation or problem. -280-
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IELTS essay In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
275 words
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