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In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects and boys tend to choose science subjects. Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?

In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects and boys tend to choose science subjects. Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed? 2EEo
Although the number of female students applying for science-based subjects and their counterparts that are choosing to follow the path of art subjects have been on the increase over the last decade, it is evident that there still exist certain preferences depending on the gender. I believe that this has occurred owing to the social norms and expectations, which need to be critically analysed and transformed. What we choose to study often have a significant impact on our life. In the course of deciding what subject we are going to study, we often come to a decision by implementing what we have been exposed to either directly or indirectly, as well as obliviously the norms and expectations of the society in which we have grown up. For example, if there is a degrading stigma attached to females working in a mining site as a miner or an engineer in a society, those who grew up, having such an idea implanted in their subconsciousness, would be reluctant to choose that path. On the contrary, if they are from more enlightened, educated and genuinely supportive family background and were raised to make their voice, they are less likely to just conform to a certain gender role in attempt to avoid the criticism and doubtful gaze from other people. So, do we really need to actively reverse the trend of proportionally different female and male student ratio in certain faculties? To a certain extent, I think, yes. If some male nurses or primary school teachers and female doctors or engineers are treated differently in their workplace as well as in their society, I consider that it merely reflects the shortcomings of our probably the most advanced and developed society in human history. In order to achieve more balance, I strongly believe, students should be allowed and encouraged to actively explore their interests and potential, and how much supportive a society can be in helping them to achieve this goal decides its openness, flexibility, potential to prosper, and thrive. In conclusion, I am of the opinion that for a change to occur, this somewhat apparently disproportionate gender-based academic or career choices in the humanities and science faculties requires more holistic and analytic approach, preferably taking into account the underlying social norms and expectations that reside in our society.
Although the number of
female
students applying for science-based subjects and their counterparts that are choosing to follow the path of art subjects have been on the increase over the last decade, it is evident that there
still
exist
certain
preferences depending on the gender. I believe that this has occurred owing to the social norms and expectations, which need to be
critically
analysed
and transformed.

What we choose to study
often
have a significant impact on our life. In the course of deciding what subject we are going to study, we
often
come
to a decision by implementing what we have
been exposed
to either
directly
or
indirectly
,
as well
as
obliviously
the norms and expectations of the
society
in which we have grown up.
For example
, if there is a degrading stigma attached to
females
working in a mining site as a miner or an engineer in a
society
, those who grew up, having such an
idea
implanted in their subconsciousness, would be reluctant to choose that path.
On the contrary
, if they are from more enlightened, educated and
genuinely
supportive family background and
were raised
to
make
their voice, they are less likely to
just
conform to a
certain
gender role in attempt to avoid the criticism and doubtful gaze from other
people
.

So
, do we
really
need to
actively
reverse the trend of
proportionally
different
female
and male student ratio in
certain
faculties? To a
certain
extent, I
think
, yes. If
some
male nurses or primary school teachers and
female
doctors or engineers
are treated
differently
in their workplace
as well
as in their
society
, I consider that it
merely
reflects the shortcomings of our
probably
the most advanced and developed
society
in human history. In order to achieve more balance, I
strongly
believe, students should be
allowed
and encouraged to
actively
explore their interests and potential, and how much supportive a
society
can be in helping them to achieve this goal decides its openness, flexibility, potential to prosper, and thrive.

In conclusion
, I am of the opinion that for a
change
to occur, this somewhat
apparently
disproportionate gender-based academic or career choices in the humanities and science faculties requires more holistic and analytic approach,
preferably
taking into account the underlying social norms and expectations that reside in our
society
.
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IELTS essay In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects and boys tend to choose science subjects. Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?

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