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In some parts of the world it has become an increasingly interesting topic to know about history of family.Do you think it is a positive or a negative development.

In some parts of the world it has become an increasingly interesting topic to know about history of family. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development. PVRxj
The study of family history or genealogy has become very popular especially after the coming of the lnternet. People are indulging into this study for various reasons, which I shall highlight in the following paragraphs. I believe that it is largely a positive development although there are some disadvantages also. The most popular reason for studying the family history is that people want to know their roots. Besides honoring the significance of one's ancestors, studying one's family's genealogy can just be plain fascinating. It is considered by most to be the fastest-growing hobby in North America, with many surveys and media sources proclaiming that it has surpassed quilting, stamp collecting and even gardening in popularity. Another reason for studying family history is the potential to trace living relatives. This then opens up the possibility offinding out about and connecting with long-lost cousins or relatives. The ability to trace living relatives can also be important in tracing an heir or beneficiary. On the other hand, there are some disadvantages of tracking family history. Genealogy begins as a curiosity, which becomes a hobby and then may become an obsession. Then people waste too much time and money on it. One should not forget that it is the present, which influences the future more and not the past. Often knowledge of family history is disastrous, leading people to keep old enmities alive. lt may also reveal unpleasant facts that one would regret knowing. ln conclusion, it can be said that there are many motivations for studying family history from developing a sense of belonging to maintaining good health. However, one should not develop an; bsession for it and waste too much time and money on it.
The study of
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history
or genealogy has become
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popular
especially
after the coming of the

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lnternet
.
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People
are indulging into this study for various reasons, which I shall highlight in the following

paragraphs. I believe that it is
largely
a
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positive
development although there are
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some
disadvantages
also
.

The most popular reason for
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studying
the
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family
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history
is that
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people
want to know their roots.
Besides


honoring the significance of one's ancestors,
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studying
one's family's genealogy can
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just
be plain fascinating.

It
is considered
by most to be the fastest-growing hobby in North America, with
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many
surveys and media

sources proclaiming that it has surpassed quilting, stamp collecting and even gardening in popularity.

Another reason for
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studying
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family
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history
is the potential to trace living relatives. This then opens up the

possibility
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offinding
out about and connecting with long-lost cousins or relatives. The ability to trace living

relatives can
also
be
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important
in tracing an heir or beneficiary.

On the other hand
, there are
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some
disadvantages of tracking
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family
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history
. Genealogy
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begins
as a

curiosity, which becomes a hobby and then may become an obsession. Then
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people
waste too much time

and money on it. One should not forget that it is the present, which influences the future more and not the

past.
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Often
knowledge of
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family
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history
is disastrous, leading
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people
to
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keep
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old
enmities alive.
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may
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reveal unpleasant facts that one would regret knowing.

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conclusion, it can
be said
that there are
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many
motivations for
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studying
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family
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history
from developing a

sense of belonging to maintaining
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good
health.
However
, one should not develop
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bsession
for it and

waste too much time and money on it.

IELTS essay In some parts of the world it has become an increasingly interesting topic to know about history of family. Do you think it is a positive or a negative development.

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