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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What are the causes and measure to overcome this trend.

In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What are the causes and measure to overcome this trend. 6xpYG
Nowadays people's life style has been changed dramatically, especially related to their food habits. Influence of free trade scenario can be seen in the food indusrty of each country, as more more international restaurants and fast food chains are being introduced in to the nuke and corners of the world. Sadly as a result of this changes in peoples dining practices more individuals are suffering from health issues like obesity and cardio vascular conditions. There are some other reasons also behind this catastrophic condition. To begin with, because of busy proffessional life, majority of the individuals prefer outside food rather than home cooked items. Although these instant eats offer tasty menus, but they are not healthy as traditional cuisines. Fat content and added preservatives results in serious health problems. Furthermore, todays generations especially young bloods are not at all interested in doing any physical exercises, they rather spent their free time on computers and other technological gadgets. Eventually they will end with serious health and fitness issues. Moreover packaged ready to cook items are also playing a major role in affecting individuals physical well being In order to overcome this trend, first, individuals need to be educated about their health conditions and encourage them to takes adequate steps to avoid unhealthy foods and rely more on healthy dining's. In addition, each and every person should engage in to any physical recreational activities rather than sitting in idle during their free time, so that way they can improve their overall health and fitness. What is more, authorities can also came in to act by implementing proper rules and regulations to protect it's citizens from being affected from harmful cuisines and dining habits. To recapitulate, the world is changing very rapidly so as the people's life patterns too. So it is up to the each individuals responsibility to choose what is best for their health. This doesn't mean that everyone should avoid outside food but rather they should keep its consumption to a healthy sustainable manner.
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's life style has been
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changed
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especially
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food
habits. Influence of free trade scenario can be
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seen
in the
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food
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indusrty
of each country, as
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more more
international restaurants and
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fast
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food
chains are
being introduced
in to the nuke and corners of the world.
Sadly
as a result
of this
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changes
in peoples dining practices more
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individuals
are suffering from
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health
issues like obesity and cardio vascular conditions. There are
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some
other reasons
also
behind this catastrophic condition.

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begin
with,
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because
of busy
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proffessional
life,
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majority of
the
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individuals
prefer outside
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food
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rather
than home cooked items. Although these instant eats offer tasty menus,
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but
they are not healthy as traditional cuisines.
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Fat
content and
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added
preservatives results in serious
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health
problems.
Furthermore
,
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todays
generations
especially
young bloods are not at all interested in doing any physical exercises, they
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rather
spent their free time on computers and other technological gadgets.
Eventually
they will
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end
with serious
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health
and fitness issues.
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Moreover
packaged ready to cook items are
also
playing a major role in affecting
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individuals
physical
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well being


In order to overcome this trend,
first
,
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individuals
need to
be educated
about their
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health
conditions and encourage them to takes adequate steps to avoid unhealthy
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foods
and rely more on healthy dining's.
In addition
, each and every person should engage in to any physical recreational activities
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rather
than sitting in idle during their free time,
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so
that way they can
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improve
their
overall
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health
and fitness.
What is more
, authorities can
also
came in to act by implementing proper
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rules
and regulations
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to protect it's citizens
from being
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affected
from harmful cuisines and dining habits.

To recapitulate, the world is changing
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very
rapidly
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so
as the
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people
's life patterns too.
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it is up to
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the each
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individuals
responsibility to choose what is best for their
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health
. This doesn't mean that everyone should avoid outside
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food
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but
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rather
they should
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keep
its consumption to a healthy sustainable manner.
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IELTS essay In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What are the causes and measure to overcome this trend.

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