Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

in some countries people spend long hours at work. why does this happen? is it positive or negative development

in some countries people spend long hours at work. why does this happen? is it positive or negative development nawR
It is widely observed that working time is increasingly extended in different parts of the world. While this essay attempts to shed some light on the reasons for such phenomenon, I believe this carries both positive and negative implications. . The underlying justification for overtime working stems from the desires for increased professional productivity. It is largely assumed that more time spent at the workplace is tantamount to more work being done. Higher volumes of workload being dealt with are likely to yield greater levels of job effectiveness. Another reason can be attributed to one’s aspirations to climb the corporate ladder. The proof that an employee is willing to stay for another few hours at work can be perceived as a key indicator of one’s serious commitment to the job. Given that dedication is a highly sought-after attribute in the eye of employers, spending extra time at the workplace might potentially be translated into increased promotion prospects that often come along with higher salaries and professional status. I acknowledge that the growing trend towards longer hours at work has its demerits but it also comes with its trade-offs. In terms of the advantages, this phenomenon is likely to maximize work efficiency. More focused stretches of work can be fulfilled, which will likely lead to better bottom line and rising prosperity for a company. On the other side of the equation, prolonging time at the workplace might trigger a decline in physical and mental well-being. It is possible that the extension of working time will leave workers increasingly drained after consecutive hours of working. Soon enough, their physical stamina will be undermined, along with a heightened sense of job dissatisfaction that will in turn provoke mental frustration and depression. To conclude, I am convinced that working overtime is primarily attributable to the demand for higher work efficiency and promotional aspirations. This trend is likely to produce both desirable and unwanted effects to the economy generally and to the workers specifically.
It is
widely
observed that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
is
increasingly
extended in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
parts of the world. While this essay attempts to shed
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
light on the reasons for such phenomenon, I believe this carries both
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
implications.
Don't put a space before the full stop
.


The underlying justification for overtime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
stems from the desires for increased professional productivity. It is
largely
assumed that more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
spent at the workplace is tantamount to more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
being done
. Higher volumes of workload
being dealt
with are
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
likely
to yield greater levels of job effectiveness. Another reason can
be attributed
to one’s aspirations to climb the corporate ladder. The proof that an employee is willing to stay for another few hours at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
can
be perceived
as a key indicator of one’s serious commitment to the job.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Given
that dedication is a
highly
sought-after attribute in the eye of employers, spending extra
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
at the workplace might
potentially
be translated
into increased promotion prospects that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
along with higher salaries and professional status.

I acknowledge that the growing trend towards longer hours at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
has its demerits
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
it
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
with its trade-offs. In terms of the advantages, this phenomenon is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
likely
to maximize
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
efficiency. More focused stretches of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
can
be fulfilled
, which will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
likely
lead to better bottom line and rising prosperity for a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
. On the other side of the equation, prolonging
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
at the workplace might trigger a decline in physical and mental well-being. It is possible that the extension of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
workers
increasingly
drained after consecutive hours of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Soon
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
, their physical stamina will
be undermined
, along with a heightened sense of job dissatisfaction that will in turn provoke mental frustration and depression.

To conclude
, I
am convinced
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
working
overtime is
primarily
attributable to the demand for higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
efficiency and promotional aspirations. This trend is
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
likely
to produce both desirable and unwanted effects to the economy
generally
and to the workers
specifically
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay in some countries people spend long hours at work. why does this happen? is it positive or negative development

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts