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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation? wwAN
In recent years, the number of residential property buyer has soared with an unmatched speed. In my opinion, this is a negative development and I will explain it in this essay. One of the key reasons why owning a property is preferred is due to the appreciation of the price in a short period. Consequently, more people can make big-money investing in houses. Everyone involved in the process makes money for example, the seller, the commission agent, municipal office, and also the buyer by reselling the property. However, there are potential risks here if financial institutes are involved. This will result in impacting the global economy if people default the loans. Also, this will create a virtual inflation scenario and increase burden on the people who genuinely need housing. Morevoer, another reason is that statistically many of the house buyers using bank loans are youngsters in their thirties or forties. They want to get over with the house ownership before their offspring is ready for college education. As a result, they could use house as mortgage for education loan or at least avoiding house rent payment along side college fees. Sense of belonging, and social status are also important reasons for owning a house. Some people consider rented house as stop-gap arrangement and strive to own a house so that they can live the way they want it. In some circles, match-making is challening if a groom could not afford his own house. This is leading to a stressful situation as people have to work to the commitment even their physique and psyche are affected. In conclusion, it can be comprehended that people want to own house for various reasons such as profit, better lifestyle, sense of ownership, or social obligation therefore property price is increasing. This trend would have a damaging impact on both economic growth and individual well-being. Personally, I think this is a negative development.
In recent years, the number of residential
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property
buyer has soared with an unmatched speed. In my opinion, this is a
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negative
development and I will
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explain
it in this essay.

One of the key
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reasons
why owning a
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property
is preferred
is due to the appreciation of the price in a short period.
Consequently
, more
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people
can
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make
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big
-money investing in
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houses
. Everyone involved in the process
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makes
money
for example
, the seller, the commission agent, municipal office, and
also
the buyer by reselling the
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property
.
However
, there are potential
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risks
here if financial institutes
are involved
. This will result in impacting the global economy if
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people
default the loans.
Also
, this will create a virtual inflation scenario and increase burden on the
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people
who
genuinely
need housing.

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Morevoer
, another
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reason
is that
statistically
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many
of the
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house
buyers using bank loans are youngsters in their thirties or forties. They want to
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get
over with the
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house
ownership
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before
their offspring is ready for college education.
As a result
, they could
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use
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house
as mortgage for education loan or at least avoiding
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house
rent payment
Did you mean "alongside"?
along side
college fees.

Sense of belonging, and social status are
also
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important
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reasons
for owning a
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house
.
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Some
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people
consider rented
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house
as
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stop
-gap arrangement and strive to
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own
a
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house
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so
that they can
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live
the way they want it.

In
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some
circles, match-making is
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challening
if a groom could not afford his
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
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house
. This is leading to a stressful situation as
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people
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have to
work to the commitment even their physique and psyche are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
.

In conclusion
, it can
be comprehended
that
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people
want to
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own
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house
for various
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reasons
such as profit, better lifestyle, sense of ownership, or social obligation
therefore
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property
price is increasing. This trend would have a damaging impact on both economic growth and individual well-being.
Personally
, I
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think
this is a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
development.
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IELTS essay In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might be this the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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6 paragraphs
318 words
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