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some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for business. Discuss both sides, and give your own opinion.

some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for business. axbY
Feeling concerned about the consequences of human activities on the environment, governments throughout the world seek ways to address this issue. Opinions widely vary as to whether the overall effect of climate change reforms on businesses is positive or negative. Personally, I believe these policies would bring a change for the better. This essay will analyze both sides of the argument and give a concluding view. On the one hand, it appears that these reforms would indeed be expensive for some businesses because of changing their infrastructures. Obviously, small companies cannot bear the burden of these exorbitant costs, leading them to go bankrupt. This, in turn, may cause unemployment issues, which have negative effects on countries' economy. Added to this, implementing these reforms would increase products' cost, which may lead to dissatisfaction or even loss of loyal customers. As such, these policies can be viewed as serious threats that may reduce the businesses' output and efficiency. Conversely, it is claimed that companies should take environmental responsibilities more instead of just increasing their profit, and these reforms provide them with a chance to further flourish/ thrive. Bearing in mind that the number of eco-warriors has increased significantly over recent years, companies which carry out climate change reforms may reach a new target group/find a niche in the market. In other words, eco-friendly products would motivate these consumers to purchase them, which can enhance/develop companies' reputation and their brands' value. Mercedes Benz's manufacturing electric cars or replacing plastic cans with paper ones by Coca-Cola are excellent illustrations for these reforms. In conclusion, it appears that even though climate change reforms pose some challenges on businesses, such as increasing their production costs, it can also be a chance for businesses to boost their profit and popularity. From my point of view, the benefits of these changes/ reforms would outweigh their drawbacks.
Feeling concerned about the consequences of human activities on the environment,
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governments
throughout the world seek ways to address this issue. Opinions
widely
vary
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as to whether
the
overall
effect of climate
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change
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reforms
on
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businesses
is
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positive
or
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negative
.
Personally
, I believe these policies would bring a
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change
for the better. This essay will analyze both sides of the argument and give a concluding view.

On the one hand, it appears that these
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reforms
would
indeed
be expensive for
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some
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businesses
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because
of changing their infrastructures.
Obviously
,
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small
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companies
cannot bear the burden of these exorbitant costs, leading them to go bankrupt. This, in turn, may cause unemployment issues, which have
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negative
effects on countries' economy.
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Added
to this, implementing these
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reforms
would increase products' cost, which may lead to dissatisfaction or even loss of loyal customers. As such, these policies can
be viewed
as serious threats that may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the businesses' output and efficiency.

Conversely
, it
is claimed
that
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companies
should take environmental responsibilities more
instead
of
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just
increasing their profit, and these
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reforms
provide them with a chance to
further
flourish/ thrive. Bearing in mind that the number of
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eco-warriors
has increased
significantly
over recent years,
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companies
which carry out climate
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change
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reforms
may reach a new target group/find a niche in the market.
In other words
, eco-friendly products would motivate these consumers to
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purchase
them, which can enhance/develop
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
' reputation and their brands' value.
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Mercedes Benz
's manufacturing electric cars or replacing plastic cans with paper ones by Coca-Cola are excellent illustrations for these reforms.

In conclusion
, it appears that
even though
climate
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change
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reforms
pose
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some
challenges on
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businesses
, such as increasing their production costs, it can
also
be a chance for
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businesses
to boost their profit and popularity. From my point of view, the benefits of these
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
/
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reforms
would outweigh their drawbacks.

IELTS essay some think that climate change reforms will negatively affect business. Others feel they are an opportunity for business.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
308 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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