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In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in store. What are the reasons for this? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in store. What are the reasons for this? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages? ewEQK
These days, people are increasingly leaning towards shopping on the Internet rather than l going to stores. In this essay, I will explain the justifications behind the phenomenon and illustrate my opinions that the disadvantages of this trend overshadow its advantages. Regarding the causes behind this trend, there are several explanations that can be done to justify it. Firstly, online shopping is undeniably convenient especially when purchasers do not have time to shop around. People can buy merchandise at home with just a click; therefore, the cost and pollution generated from transport is also significantly reduced. Moreover, a few customers are afraid to face unpleasant shopping experiences such as rude shop assistants or being ripped off; as a result, online shopping without human contact and visible pricing is their top choice. Secondly, online shopping allows people to easily pick up a bargain. For instance, E-commerce trading floors often hold flash sales while stores have only a few seasonal discounts. Besides, due to paying the costs of running a shop, products in stores are more costly than those online, without having significant differences in quality. Despite having undeniable benefits, online shopping has a large number of drawbacks. First, consumers have no opportunity to try on clothes before paying for something. There are many cases where delivered items have a poorer or unmatched quality compared to images advertised online. Moreover, due to having low prices, online shops often have no return policy or really complicated ones so that customers have no choice but to give it away or just leave it untouched and wasted. Second, people tend to overspend and buy useless things when shopping online. This is explained by the behaviours of seeing a product on sale, customers usually have less hesitation in buying, which leads to unnecessary purchases and a waste of money for buyers. In conclusion, I believe that online shopping is partly superior to conventional shopping and able to resolve existing drawbacks of the in-store purchase. However, there are several disadvantages underlying when it comes to blindly shopping online that everyone needs to consider.
These days,
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people
are
increasingly
leaning towards
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shopping
on the Internet
rather
than l going to stores. In this essay, I will
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explain
the justifications behind the phenomenon and illustrate my opinions that the disadvantages of this trend overshadow its advantages.

Regarding the causes behind this trend, there are several explanations that can
be done
to justify it.
Firstly
,
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online
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shopping
is
undeniably
convenient
especially
when purchasers do not have time to
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shop
around.
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People
can
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buy
merchandise at home with
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just
a click;
therefore
, the cost and pollution generated from transport is
also
significantly
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reduced
.
Moreover
, a few customers are afraid to face unpleasant
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shopping
experiences such as rude
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shop
assistants or
being ripped
off;
as a result
,
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online
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shopping
without human contact and visible pricing is their top choice.
Secondly
,
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online
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shopping
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allows
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people
to
easily
pick up a bargain.
For instance
, E-commerce trading floors
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often
hold flash sales while stores have
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only
a few seasonal discounts.
Besides
, due to paying the costs of running a
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shop
, products in stores are more costly than those
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online
, without having significant differences in quality.

Despite having undeniable benefits,
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online
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shopping
has
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a large number of
drawbacks.
First
, consumers have no opportunity to try on clothes
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before
paying for something. There are
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many
cases where delivered items have a poorer or unmatched quality compared to images advertised
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online
.
Moreover
, due to having low prices,
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online
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shops
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often
have no return policy or
really
complicated ones
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so
that customers have no choice
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but
to give it away or
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just
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leave
it untouched and wasted. Second,
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people
tend to overspend and
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buy
useless things when
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shopping
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online
. This is
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explained
by the
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behaviours
of seeing a product on sale, customers
usually
have less hesitation in buying, which leads to unnecessary
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purchases
and a waste of money for buyers.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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online
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shopping
is partly superior to conventional
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shopping
and able to resolve existing drawbacks of the in-store
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purchase
.
However
, there are several disadvantages underlying when it
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comes
to
blindly
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shopping
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online
that everyone needs to consider.
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IELTS essay In some countries, online shopping is replacing shopping in store. What are the reasons for this? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
346 words
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