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In some countries it is traditional for men to work and women to stay at home to look after the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? Give reasons for answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

In some countries it is traditional for men to work and women to stay at home to look after the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? Give reasons for answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. MmRqQ
in this day and age, between men and women are on the equal footing in terms of parent’s obligation and housework duty. Contrast to modern view, in some countries it is a time-honored for husband to work and wife to stay at home to take care of the family. The situation have both the advantage and disadvantages. In this essay I will explain my thought from my own knowledge. On the first hand, from the financial issues, if only men go to work, this means he is a breadwinner, his salary is very significant. Because his salary is source of revenue for all member of family. Therefore, the pressure that they are forced to come off a busy as bee to gain huge money. Furthermore, being under family pressure, they easily fall in the term of empathy and business. Trying picturing the circumstances, the sentiment in their life decline remarkably since everyday they come back home on the bad mood which procced from boss’s scold and criticism. Family may come into between the generation gap or the spouse. In this regard of the women, they also are on the complicated temper. Whist the men go to work, the women only stay at home with doing housework duties and taking care of the children. For a long time, they arise feeling of loneliness and depression. Especially to pregnant women and newborn woman, they may be stuck in the pressure and stress that leading to depression ailment or feeling suicidal. This circumstances is extremely risky because the result is beyond the imagination. Finally, the women have proved their mettle in the social and have opportunity to fall in line with the development of humanity. In addition, the fashionable social has changed so the children centre is affordable and blessing for mother. On the other hand, the habitual life impact the big trend. In developed countries, the income of the husband is high and stable. His revenue meet the family’s demand for wholesome life. Accordingly, the wife is the person who stay at home to doing the housework and take interest in children. The children need to rest the loving and conscientious care of mother in early age. The rest in physically and mentally is required for the growth of children. The mother need abundant time to accomplish this obligation. In this space time, they look after spouse’s well-being, reducing the warning level of divorce. In summary, changing the family have changed due to the social enhancement. It also eliminate the divorce and advocate the gender equality.
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in
this day and age, between
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men
and
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women
are on the equal footing in terms of parent’s obligation and housework duty. Contrast to modern view, in
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some
countries it is a time-honored for husband to work and wife to stay at home to take care of the
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family
. The situation have both the advantage and disadvantages. In this essay I will
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explain
my
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thought
from my
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own
knowledge.

On the
first
hand, from the financial issues, if
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only
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men
go to work, this means he is a breadwinner, his salary is
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very
significant.
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Because
his salary is source of revenue for all member of
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family
.
Therefore
, the pressure that they
are forced
to
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come
off a busy as bee to gain huge money.
Furthermore
, being under
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family
pressure, they
easily
fall in the term of empathy and business. Trying picturing the circumstances, the sentiment in their life decline
remarkably
since everyday they
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come
back home on the
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bad
mood which
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procced
from boss’s scold and criticism.
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Family
may
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come
into between the generation gap or the spouse. In this regard of the
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women
, they
also
are on the complicated temper. Whist the
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men
go to work, the
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women
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only
stay at home with doing housework duties and taking care of the
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children
. For a long time, they arise feeling of loneliness and depression.
Especially
to pregnant
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women
and newborn woman, they may
be stuck
in the pressure and
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stress
that leading to depression ailment or feeling suicidal.
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This
circumstances
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is
extremely
risky
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because
the result is beyond the imagination.
Finally
, the
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women
have proved their mettle in the social and have opportunity to fall in line with the development of humanity.
In addition
, the fashionable social has
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changed
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so
the
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children
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centre
is affordable and blessing for mother.

On the other hand
, the habitual life impact the
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big
trend. In
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developed countries
, the income of the husband is high and stable. His revenue
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meet
the
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family’s
demand for wholesome life.
Accordingly
, the wife is the person who stay at home to doing the housework and take interest in
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children
. The
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children
need to rest the loving and conscientious care of mother in early age. The rest in
physically
and mentally
is required
for the growth of
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children
.
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The
mother need abundant time to accomplish this obligation. In this
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space time
, they look after spouse’s well-being, reducing the warning level of divorce.

In summary, changing the
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family
have
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changed
due to the social enhancement. It
also
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eliminate
the divorce and advocate the gender equality.
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IELTS essay In some countries it is traditional for men to work and women to stay at home to look after the family. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this? Give reasons for answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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