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In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views?

In some countries it is thought advisable that children begin formal education at four years old, while in others they do not have to start school until they are seven or eight. How far do you agree with either of these views? 71WY

Some countries many parents thought that should send their children to school at four years old. On the other hand, they thought seven and eight years old are more suitable. I completely agree with sending the children are over seven or eight years old to begin formal education with my opinion. Firstly, the children have needed to learn primary life skill with themselves for surviving in the real world in the future since they was born to eight years old that because this skill significantly evolve in human's brain that age under eight years old. If their parents early send them to formal education, they will missed some big part of important skill to survival. For instance, the child never clime and falling down the tree by their innocent sense will

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