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IN SOME COUNTRIES AN INCREASING NUMBER OF PEOPLE AER SUFFERING FROM HEALTH PROBLEMS AS A RESULT OF EATING TOO MUCH FAST FOOD. IT IS THEREFORE NECESSARY FOR GOVERNMENT TO IMPOSE TAXE ON THIS KIND OF FOOD. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE WITH THIS O v.1

IN SOME COUNTRIES AN INCREASING NUMBER OF PEOPLE AER SUFFERING FROM HEALTH PROBLEMS AS A RESULT OF EATING TOO MUCH FAST FOOD. IT IS THEREFORE NECESSARY FOR GOVERNMENT TO IMPOSE TAXE ON THIS KIND OF FOOD. WITH THIS O v. 1
Many undeveloped countries throughout the world are facing the burning issue of brain drain. White collars have tended to move to developed countries in the hope of better employment prospect. This essay will discuss several causes and suggest some solutions to tackle this problem. There are different reasons to explain this issue. The first and foremost is lack of vocational opportunity. The increasing number of students with educational qualification places strains on the overcrowding job market in poor countries, which makes job-searching, much more difficult than ever before Another contributing factor fostering this trend is salary. Although engineering or teaching is regarded as well-paid careers, the income is seemingly unable to meet their expectation based on their dedication and effort. Finally, working background also plays a role in the intellectual people’s choice. Unprofessional and restricting environment poses handicaps to promote the employees’ ability optimally, which results in disappointment. For these reasons, intelligentsias make up their mind to leave their native land. Followed these above causes, measures to attract talents are presented as below. To begin with, the labour market needs to be expanded for the purpose of creating opportunities for unemployed people. Furthermore, in addition to the appropriate level of salary, extra pay or job promotion is also an eligible method to keep working on their toes. Last but not least, it is also important to construct a professional working environment which gave the talented and skilled employees the chances to develop their maximum capability. In conclusion, it is clear that there are obvious reasons for brain capital flight in developing countries. However, I take the view that if steps are implemented efficiently, we are absolutely able to take a positive look on a brighter future.
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Many
undeveloped
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countries
throughout the world are facing the burning issue of brain drain. White collars have tended to
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move
to developed
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countries
in the hope of better employment prospect. This essay will discuss several causes and suggest
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some
solutions to tackle this problem.

There are
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different
reasons to
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explain
this issue. The
first
and foremost is lack of vocational opportunity. The increasing number of students with educational qualification places strains on the overcrowding job market in poor
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countries
, which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
job-searching, much more difficult than ever
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before
Another contributing factor fostering this trend is salary. Although engineering or teaching
is regarded
as well
-paid careers, the income is
seemingly
unable to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
their expectation based on their dedication and effort.
Finally
, working background
also
plays a role in the intellectual
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people
’s choice. Unprofessional and restricting environment poses handicaps to promote the employees’ ability
optimally
, which results in disappointment. For these reasons,
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intelligentsias
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make
up their mind to
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leave
their native land.

Followed these above causes, measures to attract talents
are presented
as below. To
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begin
with, the
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labour
market needs to
be expanded
for the purpose of creating opportunities for unemployed
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people
.
Furthermore
,
in addition
to the appropriate level of salary, extra pay or job promotion is
also
an eligible method to
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keep
working on their toes. Last
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but
not least, it is
also
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important
to construct a professional working environment which gave the talented and skilled employees the chances to develop their maximum capability.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that there are obvious reasons for brain capital flight in developing
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countries
.
However
, I take the view that if steps
are implemented
efficiently
, we are
absolutely
able to take a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
look on a brighter future.
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IELTS essay IN SOME COUNTRIES AN INCREASING NUMBER OF PEOPLE AER SUFFERING FROM HEALTH PROBLEMS AS A RESULT OF EATING TOO MUCH FAST FOOD. IT IS THEREFORE NECESSARY FOR GOVERNMENT TO IMPOSE TAXE ON THIS KIND OF FOOD. WITH THIS O v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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