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In some countries, air travel has become a much cheaper form of transport than in the past. Some people say this is a positive development but other people disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, air travel has become a much cheaper form of transport than in the past. Some people say this is a positive development but other people disagree. Knqa1
In the last few decades, flying used to be a thing only for affluent Society. Nowadays, aviate fare has had a great reduction and it has become the cheapest transportation among people. Regarding this, some believe it is beneficial while others feel it has adverse effects. In my opinion, although there are several negative points of inexpensive price of air travel, I believe, this is a positive development. In the negative side, the low price of flies may lead to the low quality of that. In fact, due to the low ticket fees agencies could not afford to spend a great cost and quality in terms of servicing to passengers. For example, once I had travelled with low-cost flight and it was the worst flight in terms of food, informing passengers and a departure time. Therefore, the quality should be maintained and inexpensive price ought to be banned. On the positive side, the cheap price of aviation has several assets for individuals. Initially, this issue provides an opportunity for people to has a journey by airplane. According to this, through air travel moving can be much easier and comfortable for them not only in terms of distance but also time. Moreover, low-priced tickets and travels can contribute to explore new destinations in overseas. In connection with, this gives them the chance to broaden their knowledge and perspective in consequence of seeing different cultures. For example, the latest study in Milan has shown that people are more familiar with culture and foods in other countries in Europe continent in regard with the greatest number of economical aviation. In conclusion, however inexpensive flying can have unpleasant effects namely on the quality of food and servicing, if it remains cheap, it would have far assets for humans such as having number of comfortable flights and being able to see other places easily.
In the last few decades, flying
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used
to be a thing
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only
for affluent Society. Nowadays,
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aviate
fare has had a great reduction and it has become the cheapest transportation among
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people
. Regarding this,
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some
believe it is beneficial while others feel it has adverse effects. In my opinion, although there are several
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negative
points of inexpensive
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price
of air travel, I believe, this is a
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positive
development.

In the
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negative
side, the low
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price
of flies may lead to the low
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quality
of that.
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In
fact, due to the low ticket fees agencies could not afford to spend a great cost and
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quality
in terms of servicing to passengers.
For example
, once I had travelled with low-cost flight and it was the worst flight in terms of food, informing passengers and a departure time.
Therefore
, the
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quality
should
be maintained
and inexpensive
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price
ought to
be banned
.

On the
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positive
side, the
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cheap
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price
of aviation has several assets for individuals.
Initially
, this issue provides an opportunity for
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people
to
The verb after "to" should be in the base form: "have".
has
a journey by airplane. According to this, through air travel moving can be much easier and comfortable for them not
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only
in terms of distance
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but
also
time.

Moreover
, low-priced tickets and travels can contribute to explore new destinations in overseas. In connection with, this gives them the chance to broaden their knowledge and perspective in consequence of seeing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
cultures.
For example
, the latest study in Milan has shown that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are more familiar with culture and foods in other countries in Europe continent in regard with the greatest number of economical aviation.

In conclusion
,
however
inexpensive flying can have unpleasant effects
namely
on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
quality
of food and servicing, if it remains
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
, it would have far assets for humans such as having number of comfortable flights and being able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
other places
easily
.
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IELTS essay In some countries, air travel has become a much cheaper form of transport than in the past. Some people say this is a positive development but other people disagree.

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309 words
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