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In some countries,a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. DmlA
People believe that the earning high salaries by the less people is important for some nations while others argue that the authorities should contradict salaries and impartiality the amount they earn. In my opinion, it seems that salaries should be allotted according to the profession, whether it Is high or low. On the one hand, government pay services for public sector and officers. There is a vast difference between the public sectors post which can marginalize their income and it is maintained by each companies. in addition, they can manage the salaries for each post and do not have to spend a lot of money for the people. For instance, a public sector salaries is governed by the authorities where they manage wages for each of the profession. With this, the increase of post they get increased wages where each nations gets benefitted through pension and others funds. On the other hand, the authorities should control it by raising tax for the peoples income. With the increase of high salaries, they can 8mpose tax on those and make the limit to control it. furthermore, a country have to bear a lot of losses by giving high wages according to the standard profession. It is because doctor, engineer, pilot and more other public sectors workers ask for their wages according to their work. A rapid competition on each jobs has led to bear some losses by the government by not limiting the salaries, however the necessary money us raised by taxing peoples income. The government should be conscious with it though they should register the name from higher level worker to lower as well decreasing some money from the salaries and giving pension in the future time where they can get profit through it. In conclusion, establishing different funds and saving money for each workers may be helpful for the country while taking tax through high salary may control with it.
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salaries
by the
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people
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is
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important
for
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some
nations while others argue that the authorities should contradict
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salaries
and impartiality the amount they earn. In my opinion, it seems that
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salaries
should
be allotted
according to the profession, whether it Is
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high
or low.

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government
pay services for
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public
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sector
and officers. There is a vast difference between the
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public
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sectors
post which can marginalize their income and it
is maintained
by each
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companies
.
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in
addition, they can manage the
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salaries
for each post and do not
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have to
spend
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a lot of
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money
for the
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people
.
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, a
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public
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sector
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salaries
is governed
by the authorities where they manage wages for each of the profession. With this, the increase of post they
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get
increased wages where each nations
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benefitted
through pension
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and others
funds.

On the
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other
hand, the authorities should control it by raising tax for the
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peoples
income. With the increase of
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high
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salaries
, they can 8mpose tax on those and
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make
the limit to control it.
furthermore
, a country
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have to
bear
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a lot of
losses by giving
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high
wages according to the standard profession. It is
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because
doctor, engineer, pilot and more
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other
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public
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sectors
workers
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ask for
their wages according to their work. A rapid competition on each
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jobs
has led to bear
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some
losses by the
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government
by not limiting the
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salaries
,
however
the necessary
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money
us raised by taxing
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peoples
income. The
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government
should be conscious with it
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though
they should register the name from higher level worker to lower
as well
decreasing
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some
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money
from the
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salaries
and giving pension in the future
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time where
they can
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get
profit through it.

In conclusion
, establishing
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different
funds and saving
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money
for each workers may be helpful for the country while taking tax through
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high
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salary
may control with it.
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IELTS essay In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn.

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