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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. YLR8j
In some places of the US, teenagers are restricted to outside after a particular time at night if they are not accompanied by an adult. While imposing such a curfew might be important for teenagers' safety, in my opinion, this rule should be applied for certain distances, say 5 miles from home. Admittedly, safety of teenagers is very important and sending them outside late at night, alone can be dangerous in certain areas. Many people indulge in activities like smoking, drinking, drugs etc. at night. Young children are vulnerable, and they like to try new things which might lead to developing bad habits if not supervised by an adult. On the other hand, it might not be a good idea to stop teenagers from going anywhere at night. Many students like to study in groups and many assignments from school are teamwork. I remember studying late nights with my friends during exam days. It helped develop my social skills. It might be a good idea to let teenagers go to friends' places who live near home. This will allow parents or guardians to quickly reach their kids if needed. This way children will be safe and will have adequate freedom. They will be able to learn from each other and hence, excel in studies. To summarize, the rule for imposing curfew on teenagers after a particular time without being accompanied by an adult should not be very strict and they should be allowed to spend time with their friends at night for studies.
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and sending them outside late at
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, alone can be
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dangerous
in certain areas.
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people
indulge in activities like smoking, drinking, drugs etc. at
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night
. Young children are vulnerable, and they like to try new things which
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lead to developing
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bad
habits if not supervised by an adult.

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not be a
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teenagers
from going anywhere at
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night
.
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students like to study in groups and
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assignments from school are teamwork. I remember studying late
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nights
with my friends during exam days. It
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helped
develop my social
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skills
. It
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let
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teenagers
go to friends' places who
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live
near home. This will
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allow
parents or guardians to
quickly
reach their kids if needed. This way children will be safe and will have adequate freedom. They will be able to learn from each other and
hence
, excel in studies.

To summarize
, the
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rule
for imposing curfew on
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teenagers
after a particular time without
being accompanied
by an adult should not be
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very
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strict and
they should be
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allowed
to spend time with their friends at
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night
for studies.
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IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult.

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  American English
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253 words
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