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What is homelessness? And what you think about the reasons of for people having home less

What is homelessness? And what you think about the reasons of for people having home less MMq1a
Homeless people Homelessness is defined as people who are not able to afford a home to live in. For decades, we are identifying this problem, but unfortunately, no proper solution has come yet. There are many reasons for homelessness just, like, hardship, joblessness, addiction to drugs and, health issues. Firstly, underdevelopment is the root of homelessness, due to this many people are living in public places, sleeping there, and suffer from mental problems. Having no job at all is the main reason for debt. Because people hardly fulfil their basic needs of eating and drinking to stay alive. In the worst situation, how can able to make or to afford a residence as he has to feed the children? One of the main reasons for starvation is that in a family there is only one earning person in most of the families. Secondly, some young people and children are addicted to drugs, they are mostly living under bridges and, footpaths. They are the most dangerous for society as well as for the country. IF they did not get the drugs they are involved in many types of crimes such as; robbery, snitching, murder, and kidnapping. Thus, disturbing the laws of the country and giving birth to too many problems. Finally, some health issues related to people like the mental order ones are preferred living in public spaces. They are not like to live in a home. The government should need to take some steps for those people who have difficulty making a building by giving them opportunities for jobs. Moreover, laws need to be made and taking actions for drug businesses.
Homeless
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people


Homelessness
is defined
as
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people
who are not able to afford a home to
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live
in. For decades, we are identifying this problem,
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but
unfortunately, no proper solution has
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come
yet
. There are
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many
reasons for homelessness
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just
, like, hardship, joblessness, addiction to
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drugs
and, health issues.

Firstly
, underdevelopment is the root of homelessness, due to this
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many
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people
are living in public places, sleeping there, and suffer from mental problems.

Having no job at all is the main reason for debt.
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Because
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people
hardly fulfil their basic needs of eating and drinking to stay alive. In the worst situation, how
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can able to
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make
or to afford a residence as he
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has to
feed the children? One of the main reasons for starvation is that in a family there is
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only
one earning person in most of the families.

Secondly
,
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some
young
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people
and children
are addicted
to
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drugs
, they are
mostly
living under bridges and, footpaths. They are the most
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dangerous
for society
as well
as for the country. IF they did not
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get
the
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drugs
they
are involved
in
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many
types of crimes such as; robbery, snitching, murder, and kidnapping.
Thus
, disturbing the laws of the country and giving birth to too
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many
problems.

Finally
,
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some
health issues related to
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people
like the mental order ones
are preferred
living in public spaces. They are not like to
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live
in a home.

The
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government
should need to take
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some
steps for those
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people
who have difficulty making a building by giving them opportunities for jobs.
Moreover
, laws need to
be made
and taking actions for
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drug
businesses.
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IELTS essay What is homelessness? And what you think about the reasons of for people having home less

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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