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In some areas of the US, a ’curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

In some areas of the US, a ’curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this? K691
In US the curfew was imposed in many areas, where the teenagers are not allowed to be out some particualr time especially at night. But they are sopposed to go with an adult. Sometimes curfew should be imposed just to maintain the peace and violence of the country. But few times it is also take the advantages of the curfew by police. According to me both the preferance are suitable in many situations. Whereas, teenagers are not allowed to go out at night because of the curfew which was imposed by the US government. Teenagers must take the advantages of the curfew just to spend their time with their family and learn something produvtive rather than spending their time outside and not to go outside because of harsh situations of the country. For instance, one of my brother, went outside, “when there was the curfew” and he got arrested by the police for not to maintaining the protocol of the ‘curfew’. Although! sometimes the implemation of the curfew is necessary for the country. But few times government takes advantages of it, for their personal and political issues. After the implemation of the curfew in US, teenagers was not allowed to go outside from their house. They just feel flustrated and traped in their own residence. And the police are also not co-operating well beacause of the pressure of high level officer and they are pressurised by the government. For example, when there was curfew in my home town police arrested many innocent people who was not involved in any crime. Overall, curfew is neccesaary for maintaining peace and violence of the country. But some times government takes advantages of the curfew for their political issues. Afterwards innocents people face difiiculties for some days of their daily life.
In US the
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curfew
was imposed
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areas, where the
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teenagers
are not
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allowed
to be out
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some
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particualr
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time
especially
at night.
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But
they are
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sopposed
to
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go with
an adult.
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Sometimes
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curfew
should
be imposed
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just
to maintain the peace and violence of the
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country
.
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But
few
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times
it is
also
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take
the
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advantages
of the
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curfew
by
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police
.
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According to me
both the
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preferance
are suitable in
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many
situations.

“Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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,
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teenagers
are not
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allowed
to go out at night
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because
of the
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curfew
which
was imposed
by the US
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government
.
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Teenagers
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must
take the
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advantages
of the
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curfew
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just
to spend their
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time
with their family and learn something
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produvtive
rather
than spending their
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time
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outside
and not to go
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outside
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because
of harsh situations of the
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country
.
For instance
, one of my brother, went
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outside
, “when there was the
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curfew”
and he
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got
arrested by the
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police
for not to maintaining the protocol of the ‘curfew’.

Although!
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sometimes
the
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implemation
of the
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curfew
is necessary for the
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country
.
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But
few
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times
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government
takes
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advantages
of it, for their personal and political issues. After the
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implemation
of the
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curfew
in US,
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teenagers
was not
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allowed
to go
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outside
from their
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house
. They
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just
feel
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flustrated
and
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traped
in their
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own
residence. And the
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police
are
also
not co-operating well
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beacause
of the pressure of high level
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officer and
they are
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pressurised
by the
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government
.
For example
, when there was
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curfew
in my home town
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police
arrested
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many
innocent
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people
who was not involved in any crime.

Overall
,
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curfew
is
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neccesaary
for maintaining peace and violence of the
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country
.
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But
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some
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times
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government
takes
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advantages
of the
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curfew
for their political issues. Afterwards innocents
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people
face
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difiiculties
for
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some
days of their daily life.

IELTS essay In some areas of the US, a ’curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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