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in my country, people tend to move overseas or to a different part of their country for their retirement . what are the reasons behind this phenomenon.

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in my nation, most of the working person who work in office and company. i believe that this statement. people have busy their work in whole life. they want to move another place for getting relax form hectic work. there are massive reasons behind this trend. to begin, firstly, people have bored from their work so they want to live with their family in another place and rejuvenation. secondly, people like to do some thing adventure in way life. and they get more information about country culture and customs. in addition, large proportion of the people want to visit new exotic place for rejuvenation in way life. they want to enjoy some outdoor places and play game in outside. even more, they visit new place getting close to nature. to conclude, every person should go to new place after retirement for requirement fresh.
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have busy their
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in whole life.
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they
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for getting relax form hectic
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are massive reasons behind this trend.
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they
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place
and rejuvenation.
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adventure in way life.
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more information about country culture and customs.
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addition, large proportion of the
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to visit new exotic
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for rejuvenation in way life.
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to enjoy
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places
and play game in outside.
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more, they visit new
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getting close to nature.

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conclude, every person should go to new
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after retirement for requirement fresh.

IELTS essay in my country, people tend to move overseas or to a different part of their country for their retirement. what are the reasons behind this phenomenon.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
143 words
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