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In most of the societies the role of mother and father differs what are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in the future.

In most of the societies the role of mother and father differs what are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in the future. Venw
In our modern society, there is a vast difference between the role of mother and father, where they tend to give their children each and every facility include with education. I critic that in our community, what is the major role of parents in the future. First and foremost reason there are several reasons that don't give equality to our society culture. while people believe that mother of the children want to spend whole life to enhance and grow their children where this is inappropriate. Whereas, people in our society believes that the role of the father is to make the money and drive the home and to support their family. for example as per the view of society did think that job has been done by only the male one, where the women want to handle the home and kitchen. However, the reason behind that why the mother tense to handle that family because of the lack of education where in the past people think that why we want to give more education to girls while he doesn't want to do to job they want to handle that family that is inappropriate. in addition there is an equal amount of importance has been given to mother as well as father. Example one of the family member mother or father give equal amount of time to the children. As for the general thoughts the parental role must be important in in future, because of parents who gave the more knowledge to enhance the better education in our society and help the pupils to achieve goals, while they are explain the importance of our culture and giving knowledge that how to behave with people in our community. On the basis of the points mentioned above, to give equal amount of importance to mother as well as father to that children to get better opportunity.
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, there is a vast difference between the
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mother
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father
, where they tend to
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children
each and every facility include with
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education
.
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that in our community, what is the major
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role
of parents in the future.

First
and foremost reason there are several reasons that don't
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give
equality to our
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society
culture.
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while
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people
believe that
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mother
of the
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children
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want
to spend whole life to enhance and grow their
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children
where this is inappropriate. Whereas,
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people
in our
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society
believes that the
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role
of the
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father
is to
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make
the money and drive the home and to support their
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family
.
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for
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society
did
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think
that job has
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only
the male one, where the women
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want
to handle the home and kitchen.

However
, the reason behind that why the
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mother
tense to handle that
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family
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because
of the lack of
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education
where in the past
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people
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think
that why we
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want
to
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give
more
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education
to girls while he doesn't
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want
to do to job they
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want
to handle that
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family
that is
inappropriate.
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in
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addition
there is an equal amount of importance has been
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mother
as well
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father
. Example one of the
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family
member
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mother
or
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father
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give
equal amount of time to the children.

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role
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of parents who gave the more knowledge to enhance the better
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education
in our
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society
and
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help
the pupils to achieve goals, while they are
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explain
the importance of our culture and giving knowledge that how to behave with
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people
in our community.

On the basis of the points mentioned above, to
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give
equal amount of importance to
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mother
as well
as
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father
to that
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children
to
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get
better opportunity.
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IELTS essay In most of the societies the role of mother and father differs what are the causes of this difference? What will be the parental roles in the future.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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