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In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life. 6nR0
No doubt, the number of multinational companies and the production of their items is immensely increasing. However, few people claim that this development is affecting the standard of living in a negative way. I disagree to great extent to this statement ans will discuss some reasons of disagreement in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with, the main reason of disagreement is that multinational companies produce high quality products and different variety of items available to most people. Thus, these companies provides alternatives to local products which may not of better quality. As well as, people would have more choice of products to buy can enjoy the food diversity, clothing sense. For instance, Samsung and apple are two multinational companies due to which people have choice to buy good quality smartphones. Secondly, multinational corporations enhance the employment opportunities in the host country. Multinational companies hire the brilliant and talented people from a country and the salaries of people working in a local company and hence benefiting the country's economy. Moreover, the job securities as well as facilities grants by a multinational companies are much better. To exemplify, according to times report, multinational enterprises control over 25% of world output and provide 86 million jobs. Despite from this, when powerful multinational companies invade local markets with their goods, they often force local companies with fewer resources to go out of business. In consequence, people are obliged to buy multinational products whether they like them or not. In conclusion, multinational companies have more benefits as these provides good quality products and job opportunities.
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companies
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increasing.
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people
claim that this development is affecting the standard of living in a
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negative
way. I disagree to great extent to this statement ans will discuss
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some
reasons of disagreement in the subsequent paragraphs.

To commence with, the main reason of disagreement is that
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multinational
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companies
produce high
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quality
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products
and
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different
variety of items available to most
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people
.
Thus
, these
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companies
provides alternatives to
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local
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products
which may not of better
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quality
.
As well
as,
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people
would have more choice of
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products
to
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buy
can enjoy the food diversity, clothing sense.
For instance
, Samsung and apple are two
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multinational
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companies
due to which
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people
have choice to
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buy
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good
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quality
smartphones.

Secondly
,
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multinational
corporations enhance the employment opportunities in the host country.
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Multinational
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companies
hire the brilliant and talented
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people
from a country and the salaries of
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people
working in a
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local
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company
and
hence
benefiting the country's economy.
Moreover
, the job securities
as well
as facilities grants by a
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multinational
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companies
are much better. To exemplify, according to times report,
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enterprises control over 25% of world output and provide 86 million jobs.

Despite from this, when powerful
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multinational
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companies
invade
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local
markets with their
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goods
, they
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often
force
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local
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companies
with fewer resources to go out of business. In consequence,
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people
are obliged
to
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buy
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multinational
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products
whether they like them or not.

In conclusion
,
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companies
have more benefits as
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these provides
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quality
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products
and job opportunities.
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IELTS essay In most countries multinational companies and their products are becoming more and more important. This trend is seriously damaging our quality of life.

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  American English
5 paragraphs
260 words
6.0
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