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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction, causing high levels of water and air pollution. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction, causing high levels of water and air pollution. What measures could be taken to prevent this? j2md
Developing countries around the globe are constantly striving to cope up with developed countries by constructing sky high buildings or by initiating manufacturing factories to cater different economical needs. However, these safeless initiatives have caused severe air and water pollution. I will be talking on some measures these countries should focus more on to prevent such environmental damage. Due to the fast moving developments in many developing countries, constructions of multi storied buildings and factories are inevitable. While these expansions are needed to grow an economy, we should also pay attention to how we could maintain these buildouts in an environmentally friendly manner. Even though technology has improved to provide solid solutions like ecological buildings, developing countries will not have the necessary capital to focus on such expensive solutions. Hence, they mainly aim only on the short term benefits. As a result, emission of unhealthy gas such as Carbon Monoxide and irresponsible disposal of wastage into water resources have been a major issue in countries like India. India has days covered in unhealthy haze causing lung damage to humans. As a precaution, government should intervene in these processes and enforce stringent rules and regulations. Regular audits should be conducted to evaluate how environmental friendly these sites are. In fact, government should also provide sustainable solutions and encourage such environmental friendly developments. These government instilled rules could help more countries into environmentally friendly constructions and manufacturings. Additionally, advanced recycling methods should be introduced as a solution for garbage dumplings to water sources. Such proper systems to dispose waste, especially chemicals, can reduce air and water pollution immensely. In conclusion, air and water pollution caused by many emerging construction and industrial sites in developing countries have been a 3rd world problem. As a solution, I believe governments should take more strict measures and force regulations to make sure no damage is caused as a consequence of these developments.
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countries
around the globe are
constantly
striving to cope up with developed
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countries
by constructing
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sky high
buildings or by initiating manufacturing factories to cater
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different
economical needs.
However
, these
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safeless
initiatives have caused severe air and
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water
pollution. I will be talking on
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some
measures these
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countries
should focus more on to
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prevent
such environmental damage.

Due to the
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fast
moving developments in
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many
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developing
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countries
, constructions of multi storied buildings and factories are inevitable. While these expansions
are needed
to grow an economy, we should
also
pay attention to how we could maintain these
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buildouts
in an
environmentally
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friendly
manner.
Even though
technology has
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improved
to provide solid
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solutions
like ecological buildings,
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developing
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countries
will not have the necessary capital to focus on such expensive
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solutions
.
Hence
, they
mainly
aim
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only
on the short term benefits.

As a result
, emission of unhealthy gas such as Carbon Monoxide and irresponsible disposal of wastage into
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water
resources have been a major issue in
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countries
like India. India has days covered in unhealthy haze causing lung damage to humans.

As a precaution,
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government
should intervene in these processes and enforce stringent
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rules
and regulations. Regular audits should
be conducted
to evaluate how environmental
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friendly
these sites are. In fact,
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government
should
also
provide sustainable
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solutions
and encourage such environmental
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friendly
developments. These
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government
instilled
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rules
could
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help
more
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countries
into
environmentally
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friendly
constructions and
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manufacturings
.
Additionally
, advanced recycling methods should
be introduced
as a
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solution
for garbage dumplings to
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water
sources. Such proper systems to dispose waste,
especially
chemicals, can
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reduce
air and
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water
pollution
immensely
.

In conclusion
, air and
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water
pollution caused by
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many
emerging construction and industrial sites in
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developing
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countries
have been a 3rd world problem. As a
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solution
, I believe
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governments
should take more strict measures and force regulations to
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make
sure no damage
is caused
as a consequence of these developments.
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IELTS essay In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction, causing high levels of water and air pollution. What measures could be taken to prevent this?

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