Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

In many countries traditional dress and costumes are considered effective ways of maintaining links with the past.

In many countries traditional dress and costumes are considered effective ways of maintaining links with the past. PMDRg
Noah days, the traditions especially traditional dress and costums are reckoned that the ways of remaining links with the past can be effective. In each country there are their own traditional costumes for many people especially young adults. In this essay I will discuss some of the reasons why traditional costumes can be effective. Firstly, tradition costums play a crucial role in connecting people with their forefathers. In many countries, people wear traditional dress in festivals, holidays or religious situations and it gives them a sense of satisfaction, according to their countries. And also it can help awaken people's emotions in the hearts of them. Furthermore, traditional dress of a country can help to keep the various aspects of the nation's cultures. On the other hand, not only do national dresses can preserve the traditions of one's country. They are not only the method of linking to the past. For instance, telling jokes and stories, ancient buildings, or reading historical books are more important ways to connecting to the previous time. Because the parents tell such kind of historical stories to their children and it helps preserve the traditions. To conclude, even though traditional costums connect to the past, there are other traditions which are linked to the past. What we really need is to preserve the traditional costumes and dresses.
The genitive is possibly missing.
Noah days
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditions
especially
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
and
Possible spelling mistake found.
costums
are reckoned
that the ways of remaining links with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
can be effective. In each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
there are their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
costumes
for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
especially
young adults. In this essay I will discuss
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
reasons why
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
costumes
can be effective.

Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tradition
Possible spelling mistake found.
costums
play a crucial role in connecting
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
with their forefathers. In
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
wear
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
in festivals, holidays or religious situations and it gives them a sense of satisfaction, according to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
countries
. And
also
it can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
awaken
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's emotions in the hearts of them.

Furthermore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dress
of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the various aspects of the nation's cultures.

On the other hand
, not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
do national
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dresses
can preserve the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditions
of one's
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
country
. They are not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
the method of linking to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
.
For instance
, telling jokes and stories, ancient buildings, or reading historical books are more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
ways to connecting to the previous time.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
the parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
such kind of historical stories to their children and it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
preserve the traditions.

To conclude
,
even though
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
Possible spelling mistake found.
costums
connect to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
, there are other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditions
which
are linked
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
past
. What we
really
need is to preserve the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
costumes
and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
dresses
.
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay In many countries traditional dress and costumes are considered effective ways of maintaining links with the past.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
221 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts