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In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.

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Nowadays, there is a huge list of countries where highly skilled graduate students fail in finding a job. Personaly I am a student with my own experince of finding part time job. I succeded in it, whereas some of my friends did not. I think there are two main reasons why students usually cannot sell their candudature to employers. To commense let me say that students are scared of making their own descisions. After spending most of their lifes studying at schools and universities, graduates are not ready to make their own strategy of achieving something. Instead they want their counselors or parents make so called right choice. Getting unsatisfactory results after several interviews deteriorates graduates confidence. For me, the only solution is to continue appying to job positions and figuring out new approaches of getting dream offer. Students should belief that several failures have no influence on their future wins. On the other hand not only graduates are responsible for not being employed. Every year government should publish the list of most popular career areas with scholarships and grants as extra motivation for students to study this major. Of course if you have 20000 nurses and only 10000 places half of the workers will not get a job. In order to prevent this from happening, government should have morealess balansed amount of human resoursec in every sphere. Not paying attention to this aspect will force young professionals to leave their countries or work on other position. Finally, I think students and government should cooperate in solving such huge problem for a prosperity of their own countires and our planet in general. Never giving up and finding creative, sufficient solutions are the best strategies in my personal opinion.
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skilled
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graduate
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students
fail in finding a
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job
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student
with my
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experince
of finding
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part time
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job
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succeded
in it, whereas
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some
of my friends did not. I
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there are two main reasons why
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students
usually
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candudature
to employers.

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commense
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me say that
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are scared
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own
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descisions
. After spending most of their
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lifes
studying at schools and universities,
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graduates
are not ready to
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make
their
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own
strategy of achieving something.
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Instead
they want their counselors or parents
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make
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so
called right choice. Getting unsatisfactory results after several interviews deteriorates
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graduates
confidence. For me, the
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only
solution is to continue
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appying
to
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job
positions and figuring out new approaches of getting dream offer.
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Students
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should belief
that several failures have no influence on their future wins.

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only
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graduates
are responsible for not
being employed
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government
should publish the list of most popular career areas with scholarships and grants as extra motivation for
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students
to study this major.
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if you have 20000 nurses and
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only
10000 places half of the workers will not
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get
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job
. In order to
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prevent
this from happening,
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government
should have
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morealess
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balansed
amount of human
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resoursec
in every sphere. Not paying attention to this aspect will force young professionals to
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leave
their countries or work on other position.

Finally
, I
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think
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students
and
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government
should cooperate in solving such huge problem for a prosperity of their
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countires
and our planet
in general
. Never giving up and finding creative, sufficient solutions are the best strategies in my personal opinion.
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IELTS essay In many countries today there are many highly qualified graduates without employment.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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