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In many countries today, parents are able to send their children to single-sex schools or co-education schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree. v.1

In many countries today, parents are able to send their children to single-sex schools or co-education schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 1
Education is the tool for a better future. While, some say that studying in a single gender school poses certain drawbacks to the students in their life ahead, I believe, so does a coeducational system has. This essay shall intend to explore the merits and demerit of both the approaches to reach a conclusion. To begin with, an advantage that common educational institutes offer is that the genders may benefit each other in overall academic progress. To exemplify, boys can assist girls in enhancing their sports skill, whereas the latter may help the former in studies. Additionally, by studying together they inculcate the ethics to greet, respect, and talk. Consequently, this might happen, when children, at puberty, may feel attracted to the other gender, as a result of which, they may get distracted from their studies. Ultimately, hampering their own curricular growth. On the other hand, the major advantage of going to a single sex school is that they may have better concentration in studies. The reason being the absence of male or females. They may not hesitate to clarify their doubts without thinking about their impression on opposite sexes. For example, it is observed such schools have a high percentage of students, who pass their matriculation exams in comparison to the co-ed schools. However, they may suffer in future regarding, not being comfortable talking or working with the opposite sex, but slowly this problem could diminish with more exposure. In conclusion, each of the system of schooling has advantages like: better scores, learning ethics, being confident, and disadvantages: fascination towards other gender, uncomfortable to work. Nevertheless, I think what should be important is education, these small problems can be overcome with parental guidance and with time.
Education is the tool for a better future. While,
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some
say that studying in a single gender
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school
poses certain drawbacks to the students in their life ahead, I believe,
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so
does a coeducational system
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has
. This essay shall intend to explore the merits and demerit of both the approaches to reach a conclusion.

To
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begin
with, an advantage that common educational institutes offer is that the genders may benefit each
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other
in
overall
academic progress. To exemplify, boys can assist girls in enhancing their sports
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skill
, whereas the latter may
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help
the former in studies.
Additionally
, by studying together they inculcate the ethics to greet, respect, and talk.
Consequently
, this might happen, when children, at puberty, may feel attracted to the
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other
gender,
as a result
of which, they may
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
distracted from their studies.
Ultimately
, hampering their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
curricular growth.

On the
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other
hand, the major advantage of going to a single sex
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
is that they may have better concentration in studies. The reason being the absence of male or females. They may not hesitate to clarify their doubts without thinking about their impression on opposite sexes.
For example
, it
is observed
such
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schools
have a high percentage of students, who pass their matriculation exams
in comparison
to the co-ed
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schools
.
However
, they may suffer in future regarding, not being comfortable talking or working with the opposite sex,
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but
slowly
this problem could diminish with more exposure.

In conclusion
, each of the system of schooling has advantages like: better scores, learning ethics, being confident, and disadvantages: fascination towards
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other
gender, uncomfortable to work.
Nevertheless
, I
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think
what should be
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important
is education, these
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small
problems can
be overcome
with parental guidance and with time.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay In many countries today, parents are able to send their children to single-sex schools or co-education schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
287 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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