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In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Using mobile phones increasingly on an unprecedented scale. In different countries purchasing or pay for thing from smartphone apps become popular. This method brings more advantages and maybe little risk. Using smartphone apps maybe risky because it decreases your safety while using apps. Each application which develop through different companies may contain bugs and hackers try to use these bugs to steal customer information. Financial transactions are really sensitive, and security is a main thing among it. So, using smartphone apps may be risky to use for purchasing things online. Contrary to security, apps, which helps their customers to pay online, have an important impact on people time. It is possible now for people to pay for debt online or send some money to their friend whenever and wherever they are. So, they do not need to spend more time in the queue of the bank for sending money or paying the debt. As a result, people can save sometime to other important issues. Also, when you want to search a time when you paid your debts or see our account balance, you simply use these app. In addition, using smartphone apps may decrease the pressure of banks employee. While people try to use apps to pay or purchase online things, it is not necessary to refer to the bank and as a result bank’s employee can do their job without presser because of the few customers referring to them for their important financial problems. In conclusion, in some country people who use smartphone apps increase. Using smartphone apps significantly improve peoples ease while their want to pay online.
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countries purchasing or
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pay
for thing from smartphone apps become popular. This method brings more advantages and maybe
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little
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risk
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Using smartphone apps maybe risky
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because
it decreases your safety while using apps. Each application which develop through
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different
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companies
may contain bugs and hackers try to
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use
these bugs to steal customer information. Financial transactions are
really
sensitive, and security is a main thing among it.
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So
, using smartphone apps may be risky to
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use
for purchasing things online.

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helps
their customers to
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pay
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online
, have an
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important
impact on
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people
time. It is possible
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now
for
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people
to
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pay
for debt
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online
or
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send
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some
money to their friend whenever and wherever they are.
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So
, they do not need to spend more time in the queue of the
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bank
for sending money or paying the debt.
As a result
,
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people
can save sometime to other
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important
issues.
Also
, when you want to search a time when you paid your debts or
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see
our account balance, you
simply
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use
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these app
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In addition
, using smartphone apps may decrease the pressure of
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banks
employee. While
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people
try to
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use
apps to
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pay
or
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purchase
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online
things, it is not necessary to refer to the
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bank
and
as a result
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bank’s
employee can do their job without presser
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because
of the few customers referring to them for their
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important
financial problems.

In conclusion
, in
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some
country
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people
who
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use
smartphone apps increase. Using smartphone apps
significantly
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improve
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peoples
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ease
while their want to
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pay
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online
.

IELTS essay In many countries, paying for things using mobile phone (cellphone) apps is becoming increasingly common. Does this development have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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  American English
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269 words
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