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In many countries, it is common for families to own and run their own business. Some people think that this is the best way to run business while, other think this is a potential source of problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

In many countries, it is common for families to own and run their own business. Some people think that this is the best way to run business while, other think this is a potential source of problem. with this statement. mQAn
In today’s runaway life, every person tries his best for a good future, which includes a job or doing his own employment. It is generally seen that people run their household work for a good income, while many people believe that parentage employment is the most important means of creating a problem. Although, I agree and believe that there are numerous benefits associated with this trend, yet the difficulties arising from this cannot be ignored. First of all, having one's own household profession in a family proves to be very financially beneficial because in this case, people living in the same menage are entitled to all the benefits of every pursuit. Apart from this, all the cost that is incurred in the home trade is in the minds of the people of the house, as a result of which the possibility of any kind of scam in the career will be negligible. For example, the entire field of Reliance Company has been set up by the Ambani family, in which they are fully aware of any kind of future impact on their particular pursuit, and any financial hardship that they face. It becomes very easy to deal with that. Conversely, any kind of interruption in the menage business causes the whole brood to become distraught and can read them experiencing feelings such as personal stress, which sometimes leads to a worsening condition, after which it emerges as a scattered family. Secondly, when any difficulty or challenge arises on the relations of the employment, then the people of the household, who are making a full contribution in running that metier, do not even get a chance to spend time with their relatives. After all, the consequences are never good for the broods, and the internal problems in the relations such as fighting quarrels and the power of companionship start diminishing. In the end, taking all things into consideration, it concludes that all the credits and losses of several kinds of profit and loss from a family pursuit go to the family members. According to my personal advice, every person should keep aside his business and domestic issues and move forward in life, so that any future problems may not affect the people living in the same house.
In
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today
’s runaway life, every person tries his best for a
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good
future, which includes a job or doing his
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own
employment. It is
generally
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seen
that
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people
run their household work for a
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good
income, while
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many
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people
believe that parentage employment is the most
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important
means of creating a problem. Although, I
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agree
and believe that there are numerous benefits associated with this trend,
yet
the difficulties arising from this cannot be
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ignored
.

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First of all
, having one's
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own
household profession in a
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family
proves to be
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very
financially
beneficial
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because
in this case
,
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people
living in the same
'menage' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "ménage"
menage
are entitled
to all the benefits of every pursuit. Apart from this, all the cost that
is incurred
in the home trade is in the minds of the
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people
of the
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house
,
as a result
of which the possibility of any
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kind
of scam in the career will be negligible.
For example
, the entire field of Reliance
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Company
has
been set
up by the
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Ambani
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family
, in which they are
fully
aware of any
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kind
of future impact on their particular pursuit, and any financial hardship that they face. It becomes
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very
easy to deal with that.

Conversely
, any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kind
of interruption in the
'menage' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "ménage"
menage
business causes the whole brood to become distraught and can read them experiencing feelings such as personal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stress
, which
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sometimes
leads to a worsening condition, after which it emerges as a scattered
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family
.
Secondly
, when any difficulty or challenge arises on the relations of the employment, then the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
of the household, who are making a full contribution in running that
'metier' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "métier"
metier
, do not even
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get
a chance to spend time with their relatives.
After all
, the consequences are never
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good
for the broods, and the internal problems in the relations such as fighting quarrels and the power of companionship
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start
diminishing.

In the
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end
, taking all things into consideration, it concludes that all the credits and losses of several
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
kinds
of profit and loss from a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
pursuit go to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
family
members. According to my personal advice, every person should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
aside his business and domestic issues and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
forward in life,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that any future problems may not affect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
living in the same
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.
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IELTS essay In many countries, it is common for families to own and run their own business. Some people think that this is the best way to run business while, other think this is a potential source of problem. with this statement.

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