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In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours

Nowadays, people do not have close relationships with neighbours as they are busy in their work and family. In earlier times, people use to bond with their neighbours and be a support system for each other. There are many reasons of not having a close relationship with their neighbours as compared to old days. To begin with, nowadays, people do not have enough time to mingle with their neighbours as they are busy in managing their work and family time. In other words, they are not interested in building any relationship with their neighbours due to lack of spare time. Secondly, nowadays, people change their living places very frequently due to work commitments where they have to travel a lot or get transfer from one city to another. Hence, they do not express any excitement of building relationship with their neighbours. Moreover, people do not want to initiate any relation with other families living in the society because they prefer more privacy in their life. Unfortunately, due to such reasons, the gap between the neighbours is increasing day by day. To bring togetherness amongst them, more society functions can be organised so that they get a chance to talk with each other. For instance, barbeque parties and common Christmas and New Years' celebrations. Apart from such celebrations, some communal sports event such as football, and volleyball match could be helpful to build the relationship between the neighbours. Such initiatives can build the friend zone amongst them. To conclude, undoubtedly, due to lack of time people cannot build a close relationship with their neighbours, but one should start taking initiative to talk with each other which may result in good relationship at later stage.
Nowadays,
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do not have close
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relationships
with neighbours as they are busy in their work and family. In earlier
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times
,
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people
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to bond with their neighbours and be a support system for each other.

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reasons of not having a close
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relationship
with their neighbours as compared to
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days. To
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people
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enough
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time
to mingle with their neighbours as they are busy in managing their work and family
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time
. In
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words, they are not interested in building any
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relationship
with their neighbours
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due
to lack of spare
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time
.
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, nowadays,
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people
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change
their living places
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frequently
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due
to work commitments where they
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have to
travel a lot or
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get
transfer from one city to another.
Hence
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relationship
with their neighbours.
Moreover
,
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people
do not want to initiate any relation with
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other
families living in the society
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because
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Unfortunately,
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due
to such reasons, the gap between the neighbours is increasing day by day. To bring togetherness amongst them, more society functions can
be organised
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so
that they
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get
a chance to talk with each
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other
.
For instance
, barbeque parties and common Christmas and New Years' celebrations. Apart from such celebrations,
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some
communal sports
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event
such as football, and volleyball match could be helpful to build the
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relationship
between the neighbours. Such initiatives can build the friend zone amongst them.

To conclude
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undoubtedly
,
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due
to lack of
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time
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people
cannot build a close
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relationship
with their neighbours,
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but
one should
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start
taking initiative to talk with each
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other
which may result in
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good
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relationship
at later stage.
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IELTS essay In general, people do not have such a close relationship with their neighbours as they did in the past. Why is this so, and what can be done to improve contact between neighbours

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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