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In future the population ratio of older people will be higher than that of younger ones. Will it be a positive or nagative development?

In future the population ratio of older people will be higher than that of younger ones. Will it be a positive or nagative development? PVxXK
In over the world, growing population is one of the main issue of nowdays, also younger people ratio is constantly decreaseing and older people ratio is rapidly increasing it's also a big deal. In Addition, if this situation is still constant, one day all over the world people will be face big problem. Personally, increasing old men's population more than young people in my point of view it is nagative development.
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's population more than young
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IELTS essay In future the population ratio of older people will be higher than that of younger ones. Will it be a positive or nagative development?

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