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in future more people will choose to go on a holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree

in future more people will choose to go on a holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. XK0A
It is true that In the upcoming days, people will choose to spend holidays in home country rather than travelling to different countries, I agree with this statement because travelling expose people to a different environment which may or may not be safe for them and secondly it will create a sense of affinity among people for their own country. Firstly, If we look at it from the perspective of health, travelling to a different country is exciting and unsafe at the same time. When a person travels to another country his body may not be familiar with the environement. For example, Central Europe is the most tourist vacated country of the world but once a person from a Middle east or Asia travels to Europe he is most likely to get sick of flu because of the weather and the envrionmental change. Secondly, If more people choose to spend their holidays in their home country, they will work harder to make the space worth relaxing, hence this will lead to infrastructural enhancements in the country and developmental changes. Hotel industry will also be benefited and people will be familiar to their own heritage, culture and natural environement. For example, According to a reserach, In Switzerland, foreigners have more knowledge about the country's most likable places than their own residents. Hence, i will like to conclude that It is true that in near future, people will spend their holidays in home country rather than travelling abroad because it is beneficial for them on many levels including health and having a strong for their own country. Moreover, it is important that earnings of residents are spent in their own country rather than on a different country.
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travelling
expose
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people
to a
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different
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secondly
it will create a sense of affinity among
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people
for their
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country.

Firstly
, If we look at it from the perspective of health,
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travelling
to a
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different
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country
is exciting and unsafe at the same time.
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a person travels to another
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environement
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, Central Europe is the most tourist vacated
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of the world
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once a person from a
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Middle east
or Asia travels to Europe he is most likely to
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sick of flu
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envrionmental
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Secondly
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choose to spend their holidays in their home
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, they will work harder to
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make
the space worth relaxing,
hence
this will lead to infrastructural enhancements in the
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country
and developmental
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changes
. Hotel industry will
also
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and
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will be familiar to their
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heritage, culture and natural
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environement
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, In Switzerland, foreigners have more knowledge about the country's most likable places than their
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own
residents.

Hence
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will like
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that It is true that in near future,
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people
will spend their holidays in home
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country
rather
than
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travelling
abroad
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because
it is beneficial for them on
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many
levels including health and having a strong for their
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own
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.
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, it is
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important
that earnings of residents
are spent
in their
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own
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rather
than on a
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different
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IELTS essay in future more people will choose to go on a holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday.

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  American English
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285 words
6.0
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