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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. 85a6G
An excellent transportation system is the backbone of a country’s economic growth and industrial development. In numerous countries today, a number of people argue that it is vital to invest huge sums of money in the construction of railway lines intended for fast trains, while other people opine that such investments are better geared towards improving existing means of public transportation networks. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail, and will provide evidence why investing more funds in the development of new railway networks is far superior. Numerous experts nowadays agree that train transport has far greater merits than other means of travel. This is due to the fact that rail transport is more cost effective in the long term on account of lesser fuel costs in addition to driver expenses, in comparison to other forms of public transport. For example, according to the 2019 annual reports of the American Railway Corporation, businesses that switched to train transportation reported reduction in shipping fees by up to 35%. Therefore, investing towards more railway lines is evidently the wiser choice. In addition, it is a well - known fact that trains have a greater shipping volume than any other mode of transport known to humans. This is very beneficial to business owners and large industries, as they can easily transport cargo in great volumes within a shorter period. Furthermore, trains have specialized tracks which are separate from road networks and are hardly affected by traffic or bad weather such as heavy rains which usually limit other modes of transportation. It is therefore clear that spending money in the development of new railway lines and fast trains should be top priority. In conclusion, despite arguments that existing means of transport should be developed, I strongly believe that investment in faster trains and rail networks are indeed more beneficial.
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transportation
system is the backbone of a country’s economic growth and industrial development. In numerous countries
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today
, a number of
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people
argue that it is vital to invest huge sums of money in the construction of
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railway
lines intended for
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fast
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trains
, while
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other
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people
opine that such investments are better geared towards improving existing means of public
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transportation
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networks
. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in detail, and will provide evidence why investing more funds in the development of new
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railway
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networks
is far superior.

Numerous experts nowadays
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agree
that
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train
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transport
has far greater merits than
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other
means of travel.
This is due to the fact that
rail
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transport
is more cost effective in the long term on account of lesser fuel costs
in addition
to driver expenses,
in comparison
to
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other
forms of public
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transport
.
For example
, according to the 2019 annual reports of the American
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Railway
Corporation, businesses that switched to
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train
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transportation
reported reduction in shipping fees by up to 35%.
Therefore
, investing towards more
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railway
lines is
evidently
the wiser choice.

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known fact that
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trains
have a greater shipping volume than any
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other
mode of
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transport
known to humans. This is
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beneficial to business owners and large industries, as they can
easily
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transport
cargo in great volumes within a shorter period.
Furthermore
,
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trains
have specialized
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tracks
which are separate from road
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networks
and are hardly
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affected
by traffic or
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bad
weather such as heavy rains which
usually
limit
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other
modes of
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transportation
. It is
therefore
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clear
that spending money in the development of new
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railway
lines and
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fast
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trains
should be top priority.

In conclusion
, despite arguments that existing means of
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transport
should
be developed
, I
strongly
believe that investment in faster
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trains
and rail
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networks
are
indeed
more beneficial.
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IELTS essay In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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