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In a number o f countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums o f money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people
there is a quotation such as “Caring is sharing”. To
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help
others and to represent them with
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some
useful
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information
via the scientific journals or business activities is quite normal. The main reason is to have privacy,
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so
that others will not be able to steal it.
For instance
, in our daily life
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postgraduate students are trying to deal with the issues relating to the dissertation defense, on this occasion it
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.
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people
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information
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good
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information
or knowledge can lead to
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consequences. In the majority of cases scientists spend their significant time either for research or concrete themes, whereas others would like to obtain it without any payment. For illustration, a couple of years ago the data
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given
by the academic site “Elsevier”, represented that the majority of
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people
refused to share the valuable
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information
due to their effort and
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hard
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with others, in case of taking into account the status of privacy.
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the knowledge
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IELTS essay In a number o f countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums o f money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport.

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4 paragraphs
283 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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