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improving the environment by individuals or authorities

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The issue of improving the environment by individuals or authorities in several countries has grown in importance over the past few decades. Personally, I agree with the idea that individuals are unable to do a significant impact on improving the environment. Obviously, with regard to environmental improvement, the governments and large companies can play their part by facilitating some situations. They can invest a sizable amount of money so as to preserve the environment. So it is more likely to the environment become improve in the future. Moreover, the government can impose some hefty fines for those who damage the environment. As a result, these fines can act as a deterrent in order to protect the environment. For instance, in my country Iran, people who do illegal hunting are known as criminals and also they are severely punished by governments. With decreasing illegal hinting, It seems that it can help to protect some endangered species. On the other hand, there are those who subscribe to the view that people can do many things to improve the environment. They insist that common people and communities can play a vital role to protect the environment through social and voluntary activities such as environmental tours or nature activities. However, I do not find this argument valid because these associations or NGOs are usually doing volunteer working on a limited scale. So it is not adequate to improve the vast area of the environment and their impact are not sufficient. To sum up. due to the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that the role of the governments and large companies are more prominent in both economical points of view and llegal restriction.
The issue of improving the
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environment
by individuals or authorities in several countries has grown in importance over the past few decades.
Personally
, I
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agree
with the
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idea
that individuals are unable to do a significant impact on improving the environment.

Obviously
, with regard to environmental improvement, the
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governments
and large
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companies
can play their part by facilitating
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some
situations. They can invest a sizable amount of money
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so as to
preserve the
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environment
.
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So
it is more likely to the
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environment
become
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improve
in the future.
Moreover
, the
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government
can impose
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some
hefty fines for those who damage the
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environment
.
As a result
, these fines can act as a deterrent in order to protect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
For instance
, in my country Iran,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who do illegal hunting
are known
as criminals and
also
they are
severely
punished by
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governments
. With decreasing illegal hinting, It seems that it can
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help
to protect
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some
endangered species.

On the other hand
, there are those who subscribe to the view that
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people
can do
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many
things to
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improve
the
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environment
. They insist that common
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and communities can play a vital role to protect the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
through social and voluntary activities such as environmental tours or nature activities.
However
, I do not find this argument valid
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
these associations or NGOs are
usually
doing volunteer working on a limited scale.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
it is not adequate to
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improve
the vast area of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and their impact are not sufficient.

To sum up. due to the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that the role of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
and large
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are more prominent in both economical points of view and
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llegal
restriction.
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IELTS essay improving the environment by individuals or authorities

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
279 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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