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Imagine that you have been asked to give a presentation on energy use to a group of young people. You must persuade them to change their energy consumption to help the environment. You can also tell them about possible new energy sources that can benefit the environment. Make a short presentation in about 2 to 4 minutes about the requirements above. Pay attention to sentence rhythm as you talk, and be sure to use words that indicate cause and effect when making suggestion to your audience.

Imagine that you have been asked to give a presentation on energy use to a group of young people. You must persuade them to change their energy consumption to help the environment. You can also tell them about possible new energy sources that can benefit the environment. Make a short presentation in about 2 to 4 minutes about the requirements above. Pay attention to sentence rhythm as you talk, and be sure to use words that indicate cause and effect when making suggestion to your audience. kjdn2
Currently, energy sources such as coal energy, gas energy, petroleum energy are always widely used for all activities. Sometimes they will use energy that is not good and harmful to the environment. As a fossil fuel burned for heat, for example, coal provides about a quarter of the world's basic energy and is the largest source of energy for electricity production. Some iron and steel manufacturing processes and other industrial processes also burn coal. It can be seen that the mining and use of coal causes many premature deaths and many diseases. Coal destroys the environment; including climate change as it is the largest source of man-made carbon dioxide, 14 billion tons in 2016, accounting for 40% of total fossil fuel emissions. The largest coal consumer and importer is China. China accounts for almost half of the world's coal production, followed by India with about a tenth. Australia accounts for about a third of world coal exports, followed by Indonesia and Russia. But it can be seen that due to the modern development in all fields in the world, there is the appearance of clean fuel. Clean energy is a form of energy that in the process of doing work itself does not create harmful wastes that affect the surrounding environment. Usually, clean energy sources are available from nature or are the products of natural products, so they do not cause pollution and are less depleted. Typically, water energy, wind energy, solar energy, etc. Because it is so beneficial to the environment, it is widely used. Clean energy is usually provided and produced from fossil energy (coal, oil, gas) and nuclear energy. Energy sources must be based on the use of clean energy conversion technology. For example, wind energy is considered the most abundant and abundant green energy source today, it is present everywhere. People use wind power to turn turbines to generate electricity for use in life. Currently, in Vietnam, with favorable geographical conditions, the coastline is long, the wind volume is high and evenly distributed all year round. This will be a form of energy that is focused on developing in the present and the future.
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sources
such as coal
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energy
, gas
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energy
, petroleum
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energy
are always
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used
for all activities.
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they will
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use
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energy
that is
not
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good
and harmful to the
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environment
. As a fossil fuel burned for heat,
for example
, coal provides about a quarter of the world's basic
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energy
and is the largest
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source
of
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energy
for electricity production.
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Some
iron and steel manufacturing processes and other industrial processes
also
burn coal. It can be
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seen
that the mining and
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use
of coal causes
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many
premature deaths and
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many
diseases. Coal
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destroys
the
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environment
; including climate
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change
as it is the largest
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source
of
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man
-made carbon dioxide, 14 billion tons in 2016, accounting for 40% of total fossil fuel emissions. The largest coal consumer and importer is China. China accounts for almost half of the world's coal production, followed by India with about a tenth. Australia accounts for about a third of world coal exports, followed by Indonesia and Russia.
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it can be
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seen
that due to the modern development in all fields in the world, there is the appearance of
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clean
fuel.
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energy
is a form of
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energy
that in the process of doing work itself does not create harmful wastes that affect the surrounding
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environment
.
Usually
,
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clean
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energy
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sources
are available from nature or are the products of natural products,
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so
they do not cause pollution and are less depleted.
Typically
, water
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energy
,
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wind
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energy
, solar
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energy
, etc.
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it is
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so
beneficial to the
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environment
, it is
widely
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used
.
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Clean
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energy
is
usually
provided and produced from fossil
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energy
(coal, oil, gas) and nuclear
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energy
.
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Energy
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sources
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must
be based
on the
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use
of
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clean
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energy
conversion technology.
For example
,
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wind
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energy
is considered
the most abundant and abundant green
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energy
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source
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today
, it is present everywhere.
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People
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use
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wind
power to turn turbines to generate electricity for
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use
in life.
Currently
, in Vietnam, with favorable geographical conditions, the coastline is long, the
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wind
volume is high and
evenly
distributed all year round. This will be a form of
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energy
that
is focused
on developing in the present and the future.

IELTS essay Imagine that you have been asked to give a presentation on energy use to a group of young people. You must persuade them to change their energy consumption to help the environment. You can also tell them about possible new energy sources that can benefit the environment. Make a short presentation in about 2 to 4 minutes about the requirements above. Pay attention to sentence rhythm as you talk, and be sure to use words that indicate cause and effect when making suggestion to your audience.

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
358 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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