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The global phenomenon of urbanization from the beginning of industrialization to the present day has brought opportunity and prosperity, albeit at a cost in the quality of life. With an increasing city population, the complexity of the challenges also increases for the globe as well as the local community. Therefore, the causes and effects of these on the current generation, as well as possible solutions are outlined below. The causes for the decrease in the quality of life are paradoxically the prosperity endowed on such metropolitan centres. Their growth is largely due to the increase of opportunities on offer, which in turn increases their attractiveness, essentially they are trapped in a positive self-reinforcing cycle. While such developments have a positive impact for immediate economic objectives, it perpetuates behaviors that can have a negative impact in the long term. However, this eventually leads to a decrease in the quality of life as the city can experience overcrowding, exorbitant property prices, and increased vulnerability to terrorist attacks. For example the density of London makes it a more efficient place to attack, when compared to a smaller city such as Bradford. Therefore, due to continuous growth and prosperity, urban citizens, especially the less well off, often experience a lower standard of living. Even greater than this, are the relevant examples of natural disasters such as recent fires in Australia, which brought about unprecedented weather patterns resulting in the destruction of wild and rare animals. These effects are far from uniform, as they affect different countries in ways unseen by previous generations. Considering the quick fix, greater investment in public transport would ease traffic congestion, as would bike lanes. In theory this would reduce air pollution, and possibly improve the well being of the population if they did adopt a more active lifestyle and cycle to work. While these solutions are local, if adopted globally, would affect individuals and many countries alike. A collective effort is needed to use social networks and other media to highlight the negative effect of urbanization as well as the negative sides of the wider ramifications on the population. To conclude, while it could be argued that urbanization advantages outweigh the disadvantages, a wealthy city attracts a large population inflow, which then causes pressure on existing infrastructure and security. Various explanations exist to mitigate such drawbacks, such as social networks being used to raise awareness of such negative impacts on many countries, nevertheless an indefinite solution has yet to be found.
The global phenomenon of urbanization from the beginning of industrialization to the present day has brought opportunity and prosperity, albeit at a cost in the quality of life. With an increasing city population, the complexity of the challenges
also
increases for the globe as
well
as the local community.
Therefore
, the causes and effects of these on the
current
generation, as
well
as possible solutions
are outlined
below.

The causes for the decrease in the quality of life are
paradoxically
the prosperity endowed on such metropolitan
centres
. Their growth is
largely
due to the increase of opportunities on offer, which in turn increases their attractiveness,
essentially
they
are trapped
in a
positive
self-reinforcing cycle. While such developments have a
positive
impact for immediate economic objectives, it perpetuates behaviors that can have a
negative
impact in the long term.

However
, this
eventually
leads to a decrease in the quality of life as the city can experience overcrowding, exorbitant property prices, and increased vulnerability to terrorist attacks.
For example
the density of London
makes
it a more efficient place to attack, when compared to a smaller city such as Bradford.

Therefore
, due to continuous growth and prosperity, urban citizens,
especially
the less
well
off,
often
experience a lower standard of living. Even greater than this, are the relevant examples of natural disasters such as recent fires in Australia, which brought about unprecedented weather patterns resulting in the destruction of wild and rare animals. These effects are far from uniform, as they affect
different
countries in ways unseen by previous generations.

Considering the quick
fix
, greater investment in public transport would
ease
traffic congestion, as would bike lanes. In theory this would
reduce
air pollution, and
possibly
improve
the
well being
of the population if they did adopt a more active lifestyle and cycle to work. While these solutions are local, if adopted globally, would affect individuals and
many
countries alike. A collective effort
is needed
to
use
social networks and other media to highlight the
negative
effect of urbanization as
well
as the
negative
sides of the wider ramifications on the population.

To conclude
, while it could
be argued
that urbanization advantages outweigh the disadvantages, a wealthy city attracts a large population inflow, which then causes pressure on existing infrastructure and security. Various explanations exist to mitigate such drawbacks, such as social networks being
used
to raise awareness of such
negative
impacts on
many
countries,
nevertheless
an indefinite solution has
yet
to
be found
.
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