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Do you think happiness is important than physical health?

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Happiness is not important than physical health. both of them have equal importance for the human life. If people are happy, but after that their bodies find problem or they cannot medically treat, they will lose their happiness. Also, if people do not have any disease, but they are depressed, after some month they will find the difficulty in their body. Because with psychologic problem many of body’s organs will be sick. There are some diseases what the doctors cannot treat, like malignant cancers or many of incurable diseases. With this suffers people have to try to be happy, because good moral helps them to stay alive longer. If I want to choose one of them, I will choose physical health.
Happiness is not
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important
than physical health.
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both
of them have equal importance for the human life. If
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people
are happy,
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but
after that their bodies find
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problem or
they cannot
medically
treat, they will lose their happiness.
Also
, if
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people
do not have any disease,
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but
they
are depressed
, after
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some
month they will find the difficulty in their body.
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Because
with
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psychologic
problem
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many
of body’s organs will be sick. There are
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some
diseases what the doctors cannot treat, like malignant cancers or
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many
of incurable diseases. With this suffers
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people
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have to
try to be happy,
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because
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good
moral
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helps
them to stay alive longer. If I want to choose one of them, I will choose physical health.

IELTS essay Do you think happiness is important than physical health?

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