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If you walk into your local library these days you may notice evidence of a disturbing trend Libraries are stocking fewer books today than they have in the past due to a lack of respect for the history found in older books a shift towards other media reso

If you walk into your local library these days you may notice evidence of a disturbing trend Libraries are stocking fewer books today than they have in the past due to a lack of respect for the history found in older books a shift towards other media reso bYOQY
The reading passage contends that there are fewer older books stocked in libraries due to lack of respect of the history it consists of, and presents several evidences that seem to uphold the claim. However, the lecture disapproves the assertion by claiming that closer examination needs to be performed. The points presented in the lecture will be elaborated in more detail below. First of all, the lecture counterpoints the reading passage, which asserts that the today's society perceives new things being more valuable than old things, by commenting that librarians are extremely protective of their books and would have gone through a considerable amount of thought before throwing away the old books. Some old books have their covers rebounded to regain its popularity and other old books are even stored in a specific place. Moreover, librarians are now scanning the books to digital content, which indicates that the decline in the number of old books presented in the shelves does not necessarily mean that they have been thrown away. Secondly, while the reading passage maintains that the books are being replaced by entertainment media that are irrelevant to the library, the lecture refutes this reason by metioning that library is not a place only for stocking books. Its purpose is to provide various types of information, and entertainment media can be perceived as visual content. This type of content will be helpful for libraries from overcoming the limitation of paperbooks and would allow them to provide information in a much more efficient way. Last but not least, the reading passage claims that more and more books are being banned due to the increase in sensitivity in the society. However, the lecture disputes this assertion by explaining that while society has become sensitive, this can also be applied to the harmful effects banning of books can cause. The resistance in banning of the books also has gotten stronger than before, which indicates that society's increase in sensitivity is not the cause of more and more books being banned.
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contends that there are fewer older
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stocked in libraries due to lack of respect of the history it consists of, and presents several evidences that seem to uphold the claim.
However
, the
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lecture
disapproves the assertion by claiming that closer examination needs to
be performed
. The points presented in the
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will
be elaborated
in more detail below.

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, the
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, which asserts that the
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today
's society perceives new things being more valuable than
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old
things, by commenting that librarians are
extremely
protective of their
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books
and would have gone through a considerable amount of
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thought
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before
throwing away the
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old
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books
.
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old
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have their covers rebounded to regain its popularity and other
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old
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books
are even stored in a specific place.
Moreover
, librarians are
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now
scanning the
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books
to digital content, which indicates that the decline in the number of
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old
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books
presented in the shelves does not
necessarily
mean that they have
been thrown
away.

Secondly
, while the
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passage
maintains that the
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are
being replaced
by entertainment media that are irrelevant to the library, the
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lecture
refutes this reason by
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metioning
that library is not a place
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only
for stocking
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books
. Its purpose is to provide various types of information, and entertainment media can
be perceived
as visual content. This type of content will be helpful for libraries from overcoming the limitation of
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paperbooks
and would
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allow
them to provide information in a much more efficient way.

Last
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but
not least, the
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reading
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claims that more and more
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books
are
being banned
due to the increase in sensitivity in the society.
However
, the
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lecture
disputes this assertion by explaining that while society has become sensitive, this can
also
be applied
to the harmful effects banning of
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books
can cause. The resistance in banning of the
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books
also
has gotten stronger than
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before
, which indicates that society's increase in sensitivity is not the cause of more and more
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books
being banned
.
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IELTS essay If you walk into your local library these days you may notice evidence of a disturbing trend Libraries are stocking fewer books today than they have in the past due to a lack of respect for the history found in older books a shift towards other media reso

Essay
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4 paragraphs
337 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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