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The Komodo dragon is a very large species of lizard that lives on a few small islands in Indonesia When the reptiles were first intensively studied their hunting technique left many biologists puzzled because they simply bit their prey and then waited for

The Komodo dragon is a very large species of lizard that lives on a few small islands in Indonesia When the reptiles were first intensively studied their hunting technique left many biologists puzzled because they simply bit their prey and then waited for RNW5k
The reading passage contends that Komodo dragons use bacterial load in their saliva to hunt for food and presents several evidences that seem to uphold the claim. However, the lecture disapproves this claim and suggests that they actually used a specialized kind of venom. The points made in the lecture will be elaborated in more detail below. First of all, the lecture counterpoints the reading passage, which asserts that massive bacterial load in their saliva cause the animals to die based on observation of serious infections around the bites, by mentioning that this assertion is made entirely on visual evidence and not on factual physical evidence. When the researchers brought in the Komodo dragons to the laboratory to investigate their physical features, they realized that they had multiple venom glands in their teeth. Secondly, while the reading passage maintains that the mouths of Komodo dragons are full of harmful bacteria, the lecture comments that such bacteria is due to a diet of wild specimen. The researchers compared the mouths of captive and wild Komodo dragons and noticed that captive Komodo dragons did not consist of any harmful bacteria while the wild dragons did. This clearly indicates that the harmful bacteria comes from the environment, due to consuming rotten meat. Last but not least, the reading passage claims that the bacteria allows the dragon to catch much larger prey than their usual diet. However, the lecture refutes this assertion by explaining that the water buffalo actually die due to multiple harmful bacteria contained in the water. The dragons bite down and tear the wound open, which reduces the blood pressure and prevents it from closing. As the buffalo runs away to the water, the bacteria in the water causes the infection in the wound, leading them to death.
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disapproves this claim and suggests that they actually
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, which asserts that massive bacterial load in their saliva cause the animals to
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based on observation of serious infections around the bites, by mentioning that this assertion
is made
entirely
on visual evidence and not on factual physical evidence. When the researchers brought in the
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Komodo
dragons to the laboratory to investigate their physical features, they realized that they had multiple venom glands in their teeth.

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, while the
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maintains that the mouths of
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dragons and noticed that captive
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bacteria while the wild dragons did. This
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refutes this assertion by explaining that the
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buffalo actually
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it from closing. As the buffalo runs away to the
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, the bacteria in the
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causes the infection in the wound, leading them to death.
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IELTS essay The Komodo dragon is a very large species of lizard that lives on a few small islands in Indonesia When the reptiles were first intensively studied their hunting technique left many biologists puzzled because they simply bit their prey and then waited for

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