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If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer. N0gm
Everyone loves his hometown and wishes to make it comfortable place to live. There are various types of problems a person faces living in a community. Drinking water is the biggest problem of my hometown and I want to change source of drinking water at my place. In the following paragraphs, I shall give you a few reasons with example in support of my idea. Drinking water not a unique problem as it is faced by numerous areas all over the world. The underground of my town was very pleasant and contamination. on the contrary now, it is not that pure due to a number of industrial units and poor sewerage system. It is not drinkable now, so, we need an alternate source that is more reliable in terms of purity. There is a canal passing through the town and underground water alongside it is good to drink. I would like to spread pipe lines from canal to every populated part of town. The water we use already, has damaged the lives of several people. About hundreds of them are infected by HIV and many other life threatening viruses and bacteria. Moreover, the taste of water has also become very bad. Even at some points, people complain that its odour is foul. According to a survey conducted by the government, water of our area is not good for the health of residents. In conclusion, drinking water seems to be a big problem and requires a lot of effort and concentration from each citizen and specially from government. If I would have a chance to do good in favor of my society, I will work on it. Furthermore, I think, all of us should take part in this charitable task.
Everyone
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loves
his hometown and wishes to
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make
it comfortable place to
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live
. There are various types of
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problems
a person faces living in a community. Drinking
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water
is the biggest
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problem
of my hometown and I want to
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change
source of drinking
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water
at my place. In the following paragraphs, I shall give you a few reasons with example in support of my
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idea
.

Drinking
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not a unique
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problem
as it
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by numerous areas all over the world. The underground of my town was
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very
pleasant and contamination.
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on
the contrary
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now
, it is not that pure due to a number of industrial units and poor sewerage system. It is not drinkable
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now
,
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so
, we need an alternate source
that is
more reliable in terms of purity. There is a canal passing through the town and underground
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water
alongside it is
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good
to drink. I would like to spread pipe lines from canal to every populated part of town.

The
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water
we
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use
already, has damaged the
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lives
of several
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people
. About hundreds of them
are infected
by HIV and
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many
other life threatening viruses and bacteria.
Moreover
, the taste of
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water
has
also
become
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very
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bad
. Even at
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points,
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people
complain that its
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is foul. According to a survey conducted by the
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government
,
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water
of our area is not
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good
for the health of residents.

In conclusion
, drinking
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water
seems to be a
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big
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problem
and requires
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a lot of
effort and concentration from each citizen and
specially
from
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government
. If I
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good
in favor of my society, I will work on it.
Furthermore
, I
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think
, all of us should
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take part
in this charitable task.
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IELTS essay If you could change one important thing about your hometown, what would you change? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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