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Humans are damaging the environment. What should the gorvernment and individuals do to protect the environment?

Humans are damaging the environment. What should the gorvernment and individuals do to protect the environment? o5LKB
The environment is being seriously damaged by humans, so we need to take action to reduce the harm that we have caused. First of all, the government should introduce laws to limit emissions from factories. If a company produces higher pollutants than the permission, it will be fined. Secondly, they can encourage people to use environmentally-friendly means of transport. To make it possible, they have to make public transportation more reliable and convenient. Apart from the government, individuals need to be responsible for reducing the environmental pollution. They can take public transportation like buses, subways and so on to reduce the amount of exhaust from vehicles. Next, they should use eco-friendly products and recycle them as much as possibl, je. For example, they can use canvas bags or paper bags to go shopping instead of using plastic bags. In conclusion, both government and individuals need to work together to protect the environment.
The environment is being
seriously
damaged by humans,
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so
we need to take action to
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reduce
the harm that we have caused.
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First of all
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should introduce laws to limit emissions from factories. If a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
produces higher pollutants than the permission, it will
be fined
.
Secondly
, they can encourage
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people
to
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use
environmentally
-friendly means of transport. To
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make
it possible, they
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have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
public transportation more reliable and convenient. Apart from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
, individuals need to be responsible for reducing the environmental pollution. They can take public transportation like buses, subways and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the amount of exhaust from vehicles.
Next
, they should
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use
eco-friendly products and recycle them as much as
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possibl
,
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.
For example
, they can
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use
canvas bags or paper bags to go shopping
instead
of using plastic bags.
In conclusion
, both
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government
and individuals need to work together to protect the environment.
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IELTS essay Humans are damaging the environment. What should the gorvernment and individuals do to protect the environment?

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