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How technology transfer our lives

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Technology has transformed the world and defenetly it has a positive impact on people's lives in the fields of communication, education, work and treatment and etc. Therefore, nowadays technology is so important and that's why has attracted everyone's attention. Undoubtedly, technology has made living easier and more comfortable because every thing has been invented is practical. As a result, people passed a long way to do their works in the past so, they had to tolerate many problems and difficulties. But, technology has leads to do our works remotely now without going out of home. For an instance, do banking, pay bills, buy or sell and exchange sience and knowledge and so on can be done just by a cellphone in less than a time. In addition, by technology a lot of diseases and mental and physical problems have been treated.
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IELTS essay How technology transfer our lives

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141 words
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