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Ho Chi Minh, September 22, 2021

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Ho Chi Minh, September 22, 2021 Dear Phong, Hi! How are you? I cannot write to you for a long time, because I am very busy studying. I want to tell you about my life in the city. I live in Ho Chi Minh city. Ho Chi Minh is a really bustling city with millions of beautiful people. People are friendly and honest with others because they always spend a lot of time together. For example, most of them go to restaurants with friends and have a picnic or go for a walk in the park. The streets in the city are very wide and clean because here people throw garbage in the bins and care about nature. I like living here now. Ho Chi Minh has different wonderful places. My favorite place is Dam Sen water park, because there are interesting games. In my opinion, the weather in Ho Chi Minh is very diverse so everyone always knows what will happen tomorrow. But I like it when it's sunny. The buildings here are beautiful, although I don't like all of them. The largest and most monumental building is Landmark 81. There you can go to the movies and spend a good time with family and friends. Well, that's all my news for now. I am waiting for you along with your family to visit me urgently as soon as possible. I would be happy to see and hear you. A lot of love,
Ho Chi Minh, September 22,
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Ho Chi Minh city
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are friendly and honest with others
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they always spend
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time together.
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, most of them go to restaurants with friends and have a picnic or go for a walk in the park. The streets in the city are
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very
wide and clean
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throw garbage in the bins and care about nature. I like living here
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now
. Ho Chi Minh has
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different
wonderful places. My favorite place is Dam Sen water park,
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because
there are interesting games. In my opinion, the weather in Ho Chi Minh is
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very
diverse
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everyone always knows what will happen tomorrow.
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But
I like it when it's sunny. The buildings here are
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beautiful
, although I don't like all of them. The largest and most monumental building is Landmark 81. There you can go to the movies and spend a
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good
time with family and friends. Well, that's all my news for
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now
. I am waiting for you along with your family to visit me
urgently
as
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as possible. I would be happy to
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and hear you.

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IELTS essay Ho Chi Minh, September 22, 2021

Essay
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4 paragraphs
244 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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