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Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads. 5V6Q
In today's world, the number of people travelling to different places is increased significantly, which requires various modes of transport facilities. It is an debatable issue that, spending only on railways rather than roadways by the government. From my perspective, I disagree with this notion and I feel that, it is imperative to concentrate on both type of transport. There are manifold reasons to look upon, first and foremost, the ministry budget only on railways have a lot of drawbacks in a country growth. To be precise, it is not plausible to construct a rail tracks in all areas, because it would be expensive and take long period of time to finish the project. For instance, the railway in mountains or in hilly region are tough to built and maintain. Hence, in that area, investing in highway is right approach, which would make travel by the buses, cars and two wheelers comfortably. On the other hand, some people believe that spending expenditure on railways is better. Due to fact that, it is cost effective and reduce the pollution and it keeps environment safe. Nevertheless, the railways connects only the major cities and towns, no service for the rural areas. Furthermore, it have a lack of flexibility due to timings and booking formalities involves more time. For example, there are many remote villages surrounded by the forest in India, where the roadways is only way to to reach these places. As a result, masses from these area receive education and medical support. To conclude, as explained above, investing on railways as opposed to roadways by the administration is not fruitful. Therefore, I would like to assert that, government should consider both way of transports.
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people
travelling to
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, which requires various modes of transport facilities. It is
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government
. From my perspective, I disagree with this notion and I feel that, it is imperative to concentrate on both type of transport.

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first
and foremost, the ministry budget
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only
on
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railways
have
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drawbacks in a country growth. To be precise, it is not plausible to construct a rail
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tracks
in all
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,
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because
it would be expensive and take long period of time to finish the project.
For instance
, the
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railway
in mountains or in hilly region are tough to built and maintain.
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area
, investing in highway is right approach, which would
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travel by the buses, cars and
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two wheelers
comfortably
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believe that spending expenditure on
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railways
is better. Due to fact that, it
is cost
effective and
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reduce
the pollution and it
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keeps
environment safe.
Nevertheless
, the
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railways
connects
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only
the major cities and towns, no service for the rural
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areas
.
Furthermore
, it
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have
a lack of flexibility due to timings and booking formalities involves more time.
For example
, there are
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many
remote villages surrounded by the forest in India, where the roadways
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is
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only
way
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to to
reach these places.
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, masses from these
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receive education and medical support.
To conclude
, as
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explained
above, investing on
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railways
as opposed to roadways by the administration is not fruitful.
Therefore
, I would like to assert that,
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government
should consider both way of transports.
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IELTS essay Governments should spend more money on railways rather than roads.

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