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governments should spend money on railways rather than roads.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement? YLBeK
first of all, government is key of a country. without a government a country cannot be ruled or moved. government is head of a nation who makes rules, regulations and policies for a peoples. in my point of view, yes i think this statement is good because train are faster than vehicle. train can be reliable and seats are more number compared than bus. in train there will be certain stops and time management will be less. secondly, the government should make a proper fare system or pricing because poor people cannot afford it. in different places railways cannot be made problems (like rivers, conservation areas, national parks or hills) and it deals with deforestation. railways can cause a soil erosion in a different places due to sloppy areas. railway can affect a national revenue of a country by cost of infrastructure and number of labors. railway
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train are faster than vehicle.
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train
can be reliable and seats are
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compared than bus.
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train there will be certain
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stops
and time management will be less.
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secondly
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should
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make
a proper fare system or pricing
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poor
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people
cannot afford it. in
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places
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cannot
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problems (like rivers, conservation areas, national parks or hills) and it deals with deforestation.
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railways
can cause a soil erosion in a
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places due to sloppy areas.
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railway
can affect a national revenue of a country by cost of infrastructure and number of labors.
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IELTS essay governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
146 words
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4.0
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