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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.19

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 19
Some people argue that expenditure of government budget should be mainly on the construction of railway tracks rather than roads. I agree with this opinion as the railway tracks will improve public transport and result in economy of fuel. The rulers spending money on railway tracks rather than roads will result in fuel economy. In other words, with the development of railway people will avoid travelling on roads and consequently less fuel will be burnt. This saving of fuel will be useful for the public as it provides them monetary benefit. In addition, it will be environmentally friendly as well, which is requirement of time in this ever increasing global warming. The burning of fuels releases large amount of carbon dioxide, which is hazardous for the environment so the step of improvement of railway system will be beneficial for the environment as well. The improvement of the rail line system rather road will improve the traffic congestion as well. Nowadays every person is in possession of a personal car and prefers to go to job on his own car rather than public transport. The traffic congestion and jams almost always result in employees reaching their offices late which results in reduced productivity. With the improvement in rail tracks in city people will avoid this hassle of traffic and reach office fresh and more productive which is not possible with terrible transit jam. In conclusion, the money spent on the railways can prove extremely beneficial for the general public rather than building roads which are responsible for ever increasing pollution.
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Some
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people
argue that expenditure of
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government
budget should be
mainly
on the construction of
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railway
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tracks
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rather
than
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roads
. I
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agree
with this opinion as the
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railway
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tracks
will
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improve
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public
transport and
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result
in economy of fuel.

The rulers spending money on
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railway
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tracks
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rather
than
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roads
will
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result
in
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fuel
economy.
In other words
, with the development of
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railway
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people
will avoid travelling on
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roads
and
consequently
less
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fuel
will
be burnt
. This saving of
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fuel
will be useful for the
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public
as it provides them monetary benefit.
In addition
, it will be
environmentally
friendly
as well
, which is requirement of time in this
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ever increasing
global warming. The burning of
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fuels
releases large amount of carbon dioxide, which is hazardous for the environment
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so
the step of improvement of
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railway
system will be beneficial for the environment
as well
.

The improvement of the rail line system
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rather
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road
will
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improve
the traffic congestion
as well
. Nowadays every person is in possession of a personal car and prefers to go to job on his
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own
car
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rather
than
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public
transport. The traffic congestion and jams almost always
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result
in employees reaching their offices late which
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results
in
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reduced
productivity. With the improvement in rail
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tracks
in city
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people
will avoid this hassle of traffic and reach office fresh and more productive which is not possible with terrible transit jam.

In conclusion
, the money spent on the
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railways
can prove
extremely
beneficial for the general
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public
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rather
than building
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roads
which are responsible for
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
ever increasing
pollution.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 19

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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