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Governments should continue to enforce capital punishment rather than abolishing it. Do you agree with this statement?

Governments should continue to enforce capital punishment rather than abolishing it. PVxbg
The increasing incidence of crime is a problem that requires urgent action. In the context of development, criminals are one of the factors that hinder society’s pace of life, and how we should tackle them is usually a topic of debate. While a number of people claim that the use of the death penalty eases this problem, there are those who believe capital punishment should be done away with. From my point of view, it is necessary that execution be kept as a punishment in the law system for many reasons. It is argued that the authorities should still adopt capital punishment because of the desirable effects it creates in the fight against criminals. Firstly, the death penalty should be retained due to its deeply punitive and deterrent nature. This measure acts as the most extreme legal action taken against abominable crimes by eliminating any inhumane individual out of the society for what they did. Besides, the death sentence also alarms people who have the same illegal intentions to think twice before going against the law. Secondly, it is the appalling atrocities they carried out that decide whether offenders deserve the death penalty or not. There are such heinous crimes that neither the law nor the people can tolerate, such as brutal killings, mass shootings or sexual assaults. By practising this kind of punishment, local residents infuriated by their savageness will be soothed and feel reassured. However, adversaries of this penal practice believe that it should be abolished on humanitarian grounds. The bottom line is that every human being has a right to live and criminals are, by definition, human beings. Therefore, if governments choose to enact laws that can take the life of someone, the public will be left under the impression that governments are inhumane. Moreover, it is believed that criminals should be given another chance, as many of whom seem genuinely remorseful for their illegal actions, to compensate and to be rehabilitated. In other words, the death penalty is supposed to be nothing more than blocking their way to become a good person again. To sum up, capital punishment should still be kept as an active legislation in the law system. Even though the law should consider humanitarian aspects as well, it is an undeniable truth that some criminals are so brutal that they cannot plead for any reconsideration from the court and the enraged public. Such punishment also serves as an exemplary measure to further prevent similar incidents in the long run.
The increasing incidence of crime is a problem that requires urgent action. In the context of development,
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criminals
are one of the factors that hinder society’s pace of life, and how we should tackle them is
usually
a topic of debate. While a number of
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people
claim that the
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use
of the death
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penalty
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eases
this problem, there are those who believe capital
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punishment
should
be done
away with. From my point of view, it is necessary that execution be
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kept
as a
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punishment
in the
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law
system for
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many
reasons.

It
is argued
that the authorities should
still
adopt capital
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punishment
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because
of the desirable effects it creates in the fight against
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criminals
.
Firstly
, the death
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penalty
should
be retained
due to its
deeply
punitive and deterrent nature. This measure acts as the most extreme legal action taken against abominable crimes by eliminating any inhumane individual out of the society for what they did.
Besides
, the death sentence
also
alarms
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people
who have the same illegal intentions to
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think
twice
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before
going against the
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law
.
Secondly
, it is the appalling atrocities they carried out that decide whether offenders deserve the death
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penalty
or not. There are such heinous crimes that neither the
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law
nor the
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people
can tolerate, such as brutal killings, mass shootings or sexual assaults. By
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practising
this kind of
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punishment
, local residents infuriated by their savageness will
be soothed
and feel reassured.

However
, adversaries of this penal practice believe that it should
be abolished
on humanitarian grounds. The bottom line is that every human being has a right to
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live
and
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criminals
are, by definition, human beings.
Therefore
, if
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governments
choose to enact
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laws
that can take the life of someone, the public will be
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left
under the impression that
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governments
are inhumane.
Moreover
, it
is believed
that
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criminals
should be
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given
another chance, as
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many
of whom seem
genuinely
remorseful for their illegal actions, to compensate and to
be rehabilitated
.
In other words
, the death
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penalty
is supposed
to be nothing more than blocking their way to become a
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good
person again.

To sum up, capital
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punishment
should
still
be
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kept
as an active legislation in the
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law
system.
Even though
the
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law
should consider humanitarian aspects
as well
, it is an undeniable truth that
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some
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criminals
are
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so
brutal that they cannot plead for any reconsideration from the court and the enraged public. Such
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punishment
also
serves as an exemplary measure to
further
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prevent
similar incidents in the long run.
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IELTS essay Governments should continue to enforce capital punishment rather than abolishing it.

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