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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.17

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 17
Some believe that an authority should build more railroads rather than highways and roads. To a certain point, I would agree with the statement, but I also believe that the decision of building railways or roads should be decided based on the natural condition of the area and the preference of citizens. On the one hand, it is understandable if some people think that a government should expand more railroads rather than roads and streets. Firstly, it is obvious that when a country has extensive rail networks, it will positively affect the logistic cost. The selling price of many goods would be cheaper since a single locomotive could carry tonnes of crops, goods or liquor. Secondly, by building integrated subway stations in city areas, traffic congestion could be avoided. For example, as Singapore has a very good train network, called MRT, most of the people rarely drive on their own vehicles. As a result, Singapore is free from traffic congestion and air pollution. On the other hand, it is also important for a state to have some feasibility study regarding the geological condition of an area before they plan to improve railroads. It is a fact that some areas might not be feasible for railways, as those areas might be swamped or have rocky mountains. Should the politics build railway networks, the investment cost might be unreasonable. For instance, the island of Borneo in Indonesia is one of the largest islands in the world, but most of the areas are swamps. It is not suitable for railroads, but as the island has wide and long rivers such as the Mahakam and Kapuas, the government could focus more on building water transportation there. The preference of citizens should also be considered before investing in the construction of railroads or highways. In conclusion, to a certain extent, I would agree that governments should build more railroads than roads and highways. But I do believe that governments should also make considerable measurement before they spend money on railways. They must ensure that their areas are suitable for rail network and people prefer that transportation system.
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believe that an authority should build more
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railroads
rather
than highways and
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roads
. To a certain point, I would
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agree
with the statement,
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but
I
also
believe that the decision of building
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railways
or
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roads
should
be decided
based on the natural condition of the
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area
and the preference of citizens.

On the one hand, it is understandable if
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some
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people
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think
that a
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government
should expand more
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railroads
rather
than
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roads
and streets.
Firstly
, it is obvious that when a country has extensive rail
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networks
, it will
positively
affect the logistic cost. The selling price of
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many
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goods
would be cheaper since a single locomotive could carry tonnes of crops,
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goods
or liquor.
Secondly
, by building integrated subway stations in city
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areas
, traffic congestion could
be avoided
.
For example
, as Singapore has a
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very
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good
train
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network
, called MRT, most of the
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people
rarely drive on their
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own
vehicles.
As a result
, Singapore is free from traffic congestion and air pollution.

On the other hand
, it is
also
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important
for a state to have
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some
feasibility study regarding the geological condition of an
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area
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before
they plan to
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improve
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railroads
. It is a fact that
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some
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areas
might not be feasible for
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railways
, as those
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areas
might
be swamped
or have
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rocky mountains
. Should the politics build
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railway
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networks
, the investment cost might be unreasonable.
For instance
, the island of Borneo in Indonesia is one of the largest islands in the world,
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but
most of the
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areas
are swamps. It is not suitable for
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railroads
,
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but
as the island has wide and long rivers such as the
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Mahakam
and
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Kapuas
, the
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government
could focus more on building water transportation there. The preference of citizens should
also
be considered
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before
investing in the construction of
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railroads
or highways.

In conclusion
, to a certain extent, I would
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agree
that
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governments
should build more
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railroads
than
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roads
and highways.
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But
I do believe that
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governments
should
also
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make
considerable measurement
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before
they spend money on
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railways
. They
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must
ensure that their
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areas
are suitable for rail
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network
and
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people
prefer that transportation system.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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