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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement. v.15

Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 15
Nowadays train ways more profitable than the car was. And with its government expend more money to railroad than roads. I completely agree with it because the track has more benefits if we compare with car road. And also there have more reasons I will discuss it in this essay. More country chooses to transport in fume line because it has more advantages than other ways. For instance, in train way haven't traffic jams and because it its more rapidly than other roads. And also it is transportation, heavy things, for example, tanks in the Second World War. With it if there had not it is hard for Russian and other country. And railroad has aspects where line gives ways to other ways. For example, car ways common used than railways because it. It is good for short span as well as in the easy weight. In result, since the country helps long stretch transportation better for them railways. It is a due fact that railroad inexpensive than others. On the other hand, thunder is more economical if we compare with other paths. And also in castigate paths is newer stopped because it. It is faster than other routes which is stopping. In economies entered with it and also with power consumption. It is a due fact that as an energy it is handling coal or heat which very worth little. For instance, coal is a fossil which do not need to be processed. If we are going to service they consume less heat and help us with this the latest technologies. In the last, if our service fume line which walk in service or coal it is good for both of the countries. In conclusion, we should not be value track in a short area. It is excellent for long gap where everything must be delivered on time.
Nowadays train
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ways
more profitable than the car was. And with its
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government
expend more money to railroad than roads. I completely
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agree
with it
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because
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
has more benefits if we compare with car road. And
also
there have more reasons I will discuss it in this essay.

More country chooses to transport in fume line
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it has more advantages than
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other
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ways
.
For instance
, in train
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way
haven't traffic jams and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it its more
rapidly
than
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other
roads. And
also
it is transportation, heavy things,
for example
, tanks in the Second World War. With it if there had not it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
for Russian and
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other
country. And railroad has aspects where line gives
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ways
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
ways
.
For example
, car
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ways
common
Use "(used)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
used
than railways
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because
it. It is
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good
for short span
as well
as in the easy weight. In result, since the country
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
long stretch transportation better for them railways. It is a due fact that railroad
Use "(inexpensive)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
inexpensive
than others.

On the
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other
hand, thunder is more economical if we compare with
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other
paths. And
also
in castigate paths is newer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stopped
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it. It is faster than
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
routes which is stopping. In economies entered with it and
also
with power consumption. It is a due fact that as an energy it is handling coal or heat which
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
worth
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
.
For instance
, coal is a fossil which do not need to
be processed
. If we are going to service they consume less heat and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us with this the latest technologies. In the last, if our service fume line which walk in service or coal it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
for both of the countries.

In conclusion
, we should not be value
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
track
in a short area. It is excellent for long gap where everything
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be delivered
on time.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. with this statement. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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